In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people s skin Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effects they have in terms of health and society

Essay topics:

In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people’s skin.

Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effects they have in terms of health and society.

cosmetic industry becomes a highly profitable business in the world as it produces extensive varieties of lightening products attracting many consumers. this essay will address the beauty standard in the communities as the principal reason for people putting on cosmetic products with lightening agents and provides a declining of health status in societies as a consequence led by this phenomenon.

Several reasons can be clarified about why people apply lightening cosmetics. First of all, in some parts of the world, there is a beauty standard set by mainstream societies such as having fair skin and a light complexion considered as the ideal feature as well as an acceptable tone of the skin. Korea, for instance, defines gorgeous as having white-coloured skin and a creamy complexion. Conversely, having brown-coloured skin with dark complexion is commonly believed as unattractive and low social status. Therefore, people spend a lot of money to purchase these items to fulfil the idea of beauty in the communities.

lightening cosmetic products are dangerous for human as they commonly contain harmful substances such as mercury. Recent research shows that the consumers of whitening cosmetic products have a higher risk to develop various malignancies such as skin cancer. consequently, in years to come, a decrease in people’s physical well-being is unavoidable, and this eventually raising health insurance claims covered by the government.

To sum up, an intention to be accepted in a community having a certain beauty criterion is the main motive of people wearing lightening cosmetic products and the health-related consequence of this trait is a decrease of people physical well-being in the community.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, first, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as well as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14317415748 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575187969925 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9506684252 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.0 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1818181818 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5454545455 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338897001355 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121341504555 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05825466362 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199980983162 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477695352411 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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