Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health Others believe that governments should make sure that their citizens are healthy Discuss both views

Essay topics:

Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health. Others believe that governments should make sure that their citizens are healthy.

Discuss both views.

Health is a major factor of a wellbeing of a human. Some believe that taking care of the health is their own responsibility while others highlight that government should involve in this matter. This essay will discuss the both views in contrast.

As an individual taking care of the health is our own responsibility because we have to take actions to improve our health. In fact, control what we eat and changing lifestyle all depends on the individual actions. As an example, to reduce or control the current weight a person needs to change their lifestyle choices by eating healthy or doing workouts. Even though, there are many programs and plans illustrate how to be healthy, at the end it is that individual’s actions make it possible.

Meanwhile, governments also have a responsibility to look after the wellbeing of their citizens. While it is the individual’s responsibility to take care of their own health, government have to make arrangements and develop the necessary background to motivate people towards the goal. As an example, building gyms and jogging paths will encourage society to use them in their workout activities. Furthermore, reducing prices of the medicines and giving free health care also will help them towards their wellbeing.

In conclusion, although being healthy is solely depend on that person’s actions, governments also responsible to encourage and helping their citizens to be healthy by providing free healthcare and underling support regardless of their financial status, so that they are encourage to use them in their efforts to be healthy.

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Average: 6.3 (18 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 49, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...usion, although being healthy is solely depend on that person’s actions, governments a...
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Line 7, column 271, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'encouraged'.
Suggestion: encouraged
...heir financial status, so that they are encourage to use them in their efforts to be heal...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 281, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
...cial status, so that they are encourage to use them in their efforts to be healthy.
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, so, well, while, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9975474187 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546875 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3671792389 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.472255437189 0.244688304435 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155685925112 0.084324248473 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128567399222 0.0667982634062 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273761889233 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105647777412 0.056905535591 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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