An argument of whether to ban blood wars persist until now as the society believes that it is becoming inhuman in nature. Where animals engage in savage acts and are killed cruelly in the arena.
The total prohibition of blood sports can eliminate the cruel acts to the animals and can promote a safe environment for them to live. The best example of this is in Asian countries. They are known to practice dog fights, where this innocent creatures fights till death. But a law banned this acts and leave about 300 dogs alive but unattended. The Animal Welfare take good care of them and trained them to regain their friendly nature. After the rehabilitation, they open their gates for adoption. Many people whobare interested, adop powerful races of dogs like bulldogs and german shepherd. Now their owners feed them daily and provided them a safe environment where they are treated to be their best friend.
In contrast, the continuity of blood sports can increase the involvement of many different animals who dies brutally in fights. If the government will not acknowledge this issue a lot of animals will be used as an entertainment and gambling. Nowadays, horses which is mainly use for transportation become a warrior in stage, made to battle one another. Another examples are used of chickens in the derby, where the helpless rooster receive deep wounds. In worst case scenario domestic animals like cats and dogs are now used in these entertainment.
In conclusion, bloody fights is seen to cause brutal death to animals which the society conclude to discontinue these activities. I agree that brutal wars are clearly harmful to every animals and it should be stop inorder to prevent further infliction of cruel death to these creatures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... sports can increase the involvement of many different animals who dies brutally in fights. If...
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Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'used'.
Suggestion: used
...bling. Nowadays, horses which is mainly use for transportation become a warrior in ...
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Line 5, column 454, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'In the worst'.
Suggestion: In the worst
...e helpless rooster receive deep wounds. In worst case scenario domestic animals like cat...
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Line 5, column 529, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this entertainment' or 'these entertainments'?
Suggestion: this entertainment; these entertainments
...mals like cats and dogs are now used in these entertainment. In conclusion, bloody fights is seen ...
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Line 6, column 209, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stopped'?
Suggestion: stopped
...rmful to every animals and it should be stop inorder to prevent further infliction o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98293515358 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63491396645 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580204778157 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.6280284942 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.8823529412 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2352941176 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.29411764706 7.06120827912 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206531246878 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058391173484 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572234239149 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123218215501 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302546008019 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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