In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In recent years, illiteracy among children in remote areas has been a serious problem all over the world. While some individuals believe that the problem can be tackled by providing computers and Internet access, others hold the view that the provision of schools and teachers are fundamental to education in these areas.
On the one hand, I suppose that the Internet connection and computers play a vital role in teaching those kids who are in the countryside. Firstly, computers can be an effective tool with educational softwares. For instance, ABC Kid Genius is one of the common softwares to learn foreign languages and attracts thousands of children to join this software. Secondly, internet contains plenty of free self-study courses, which enables children to enter these courses with the teacher through email.
On the other hand, I believe that educating children who are living in idyllic places needs the supply of school and teachers. The first reason is that the friendly environment in school can help children become more confident, develop their communication skills and be interested in learning. The second reason is that learning with teachers is an optimal chance to help rural kids understand lessons carefully and address several problems related to studying. For example, if students do not keep pace with the lesson in the classes, they can ask their teacher to explain and tutor them. Those demonstrate that establishing schools and sending teachers to remote areas have a beneficial effect on teaching kids in the countryside.
In conclusion, as people think internet and computer are essential tools of studying in remote parts, I believe supplying school and teachers are more important.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30656934307 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72332235127 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587591240876 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8808164338 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.166666667 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297576303591 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102757890944 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930992029767 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184986182056 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875033281296 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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