Health In the developed world average life expectancy is increasing What problems will this cause for individuals and society Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations

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Health: In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

In the modern world, the average lifespan becoming increasingly longer. Some people believed that the ageing population can lead to various negative influences, while others hold an opposite side . there are two main negative issues associated with this phenomenon, and also two remedies we can adopt.

It is undeniable that although the popularity of long-aged people in various nations as a result of the significant development on medicine is considered as a positive effect, this phenomenon still has two problems. Firstly, as the number of retired people rises rapidly, the budget that the Government has to pay for pensions and health services increases dramatically. Secondly, the long life expectancy can lead to the overpopulation which causes the lack of food, clean water and accommodation in some nations, especially in poor or developing countries. It is clear that the ageing population has not only negative impacts on the life of the people but also on the economies of countries.

In my opinion, to solve these problems, raising the retirement age, for example from 60 to 65 years old in Vietnam, may be the simplest solution. In the modern age of advanced medicine, people in this age tend to be healthy enough so they can continue to contribute to their job. Additionally, the Government should impose a law on population planning that can alleviate overpopulation.

In conclusion, although the increasing life expectancy can lead to some serious issues, I believe that a number of measures should be done by the authorities to overcome the problem.

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Average: 8.6 (5 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24110671937 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03201754386 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.600790513834 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7132282227 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.545454545 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0909090909 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219303763238 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778089082944 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431937132176 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130394665216 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374786089585 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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