It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. What do you think is the reason for a growth in the rate of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this problem?
It is apparent that juvenile delinquency has evolved to be a pressing concern especially in metropolitan areas, in recent decades. Although there exists a commonly held notion that juvenile crime stems from violence in the media, some other causes should be taken into consideration as well.
There is a multitude of reasons spurring the growth of juvenile crime. Firstly,due to the development of the internet, Citizens especially teenagers have easier access to pronographic and aggressive materials. This means that adolescent will imitate exactly what are depicted on these images and videos, which in the long run acts as an contributor to mental health impairment leading to crime commission. Secondly, Poverty is the main factor that accelerates individuals’ crime commission at their early stage of life. In order to satisfy the living demand, some children especially those in the poverty-stricken regionss has become a pickpocket or a pilfer for their life maintanance, which probably can breed the future offenders for even more serious crime.
Nevertheless, There are also a variety of solutions to alleviate this issue. First, there is an urgent demand for higher degree of parents supervision to the young people’s usage of the Internet. Due to a stricter restriction of internet usage, teenagers would be less sensitive to X-rated and other violent materials and subsequently have a heathier lifestyle. Second, The Government should create more jobs especially labor job to ensure a better standard of living for the young destitute citizens. For example, many unemployed adolescents in Vietnam now can make an honest living thanks to being offered labor jobs in governmental company and no longer have to steal money for survival.
In conclusion, negative materials from media definitely not the sole factor leading to young people committing crime. Identifying the reasons behind this issue is the key to finding practical solutions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50825082508 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03843016363 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633663366337 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3487775855 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.214285714 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249202824139 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784427811363 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624106037374 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134475465374 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365169966131 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.