It is suggested that everyone wants to have a car, a television and a fridge. Do the disadvantages of this development for society outweigh the advantages?
It is true that many people have considered car, television and refridgerator as dispensable items in their house. While bringing numerous benefits for each individual and society, I would argue that this trend also produce many obvious drawbacks, which overshadow the immediate benefits.
On the one hand, there are various advantages stem from this trend for both consumers, enterprises and society as a whole. Admittedly, the increasing consumption of these items could maximise profit for the car and electrical companies such as Ford, LG, and Panasonic. As a consequence, the higher profit they generate, the more tax revenue they pay to national government, which result in increased investment for key areas including education and health care. Besides, this trend also benefits consumers in terms of entertainment and other personal advantages. Thanks to television, people, especially those always caught up in their work and study, could relieve stress and reduce fatigue after the long hard-working day. Driving a car to workplace also enables users to save a great deal of time and feel sense of safety, which rarely attain when they use motorbike or public transportation system. Refridgerator also confers enormous benefits to users and is considered as one of the most useful kitchen appliances, being used to keep cool and store food and beverage at freezing temperature, especially those perishable items such as fruit, fish, and so forth, which hardly store freshly for a week or more in normal temperature.
On the other hand, the overconsumption of these items could bring many seriously potential drawbacks for environment and user’s health, which could outweigh these above-mentioned benefits. There is no point in denying that car consumption could generate a large amount of harmful exhaust emissions such as CO2 and NO2, which not only damge the quality of air, but also impair user’s well-being including some respiratory illnesses such as asthma, and nasal congestion. Fridge usage also harm environment because of CFC content, the main culprit for ozone’s hole. Besides the negative impact on environment, food stored in fridge are not as fresh and healthy as those from market due to the gradual loss of esential nutrients. Consequently, users could suffer from many diseases result from the deficiency in vital vitamins and minerals such as Berri-Berri syndrome. Because of the overuse of car, television and fridge, human beings have alse been leading the sedentary life, which is the headache of state governments due to the heavy burden stemming from the increasing rate of patients who contract non-communicable diseases such as diabete, obisity, and cancer.
In conclusion, although the increasing demand for car, television and fridge could produces both drawbacks and benefits, the negative impacts of this trend seem to outweith the positive ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, if, so, well, while, as for, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 10.4138276553 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2461.0 1615.20841683 152% => OK
No of words: 451.0 315.596192385 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45676274945 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93017849089 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578713968958 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.6906739791 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.8125 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1875 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155141732049 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546440366889 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485581290767 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108333018474 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199220535513 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 78.4519038076 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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