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Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Essay topics: Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Thesedays, it is widely accepted that children have more opportunities to live in hygienic surroundings, approach to nourishing meals and lead a healthy life than ever before. However, modern lifestyles mean that many children spend long hours in front of the television or computers, forget to have a balanced diet or do exercise. Some people believe that both schools and parents have responsibilities dealing with this issue. I completely agree with this idea and in this essay, I will set out to explain why.

First of all, parents are believed to have the main responsibility to stop the unhealthy lifestyle of their children. It is apparent that parents are the main caregiver, and are the one spending the most time with their kids. Therefore, they are under obligation, not only to provide their children with a three-course meal, but also to give them guidelines for activities in the freetime to keep fit. In addition, because parents always have a great influence on the development of teenagers, they are expected to be the primary role model of leading a healthy lifestyle. Reseachers have found that children are more likely to make a habit of doing outside activities regularly if their parents often play sports with them.

Second, it is a big responsibility for schools to deal with the bad lifestyle of students. In the first 18 years, children often spend most of their times at school, which is one of the main factor affecting their way of living. The more extra-curricular activities about healthy lifestyle schools hold, the more knowledge students can gain and follow.

On the other hand, there are some people argue that only parents are responsible for guide kids live a healthy life. However, how to get a good way of living including a lot of academic knowledge that even many parents don’t know about. Schools may be the best place for students to access to those helpful information.

To sum up, while parents are duty bound to provide children nourishing meals and have a exercise routine, teachers are the one that give them background and specialist knowledge to live in a positive way. Personally, I believe that kids can lead a healthier life if they are under the guidance of both parents and teachers.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 87, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...vide children nourishing meals and have a exercise routine, teachers are the one ...
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Line 9, column 187, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ground and specialist knowledge to live in a positive way. Personally, I believe that kids can le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, in addition, in fact, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98938992042 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80900228678 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519893899204 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8298881317 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.647058824 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294351737596 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994746258976 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675891977664 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158098531132 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779942648385 0.056905535591 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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