Many crimes are often related to the consumption of alcohol some people think that the best way to reduce the crime rate is to ban alcohol Do you think this is an effective measure against crime What other solution can you suggest

Essay topics:

Many crimes are often related to the consumption of alcohol some people think that the best way to reduce the crime rate is to ban alcohol.

Do you think this is an effective measure against crime?
What other solution can you suggest?

Most of the time the criminals are drunk while committing the crime and some people believe that the main solution for preventing the crime commitment is alcohol prohibition. I completely disagree with this view, because of a major reason which I will discuss in the following paragraph, and then debate what the effective solutions are.

However alcohol consuming would affect on committing the crime, forbidden the alcohol is not the best solution for decrease the rate of the crime. Because in that case people drunk in their privacy and as the result of that disobedience take place. Moreover, alcohol is imported by trafficker; so, another crime happened. For instance, In Iran, the rule of alcohol prohibition exists, but the hidden bar made up and the covert drunk people spread out in the whole country, but, still the crime committed by drunken criminals and the increasing rate of alcohol trafficker become another problem which police and governments are struggling with. So ban the alcohol might not solve the increasing rate of the crime problem.

The solution of reduction of alcohol consumption in order to reduce the crime commitment needs parents and governments attention. First of all, parents should control their children to not drink alcohol before 18; besides, they should not consume alcohol obviously and openly in front of their children's eyes. The Government should improve the educational goals and teach the younger generation how alcohol would be harmful especially for their health and the safety of the society.

In conclusion, some people consider that, ban the alcohol absolutely reduce the crime commitment because most of the crimes committed by drunken criminals. We debate the views and solution above.

Votes
Average: 8 (14 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'while', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.271241830065 0.247107183377 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.137254901961 0.155533422707 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0588235294118 0.0946595960268 62% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0490196078431 0.0501214627716 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0261437908497 0.0437548338989 60% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133986928105 0.122226691241 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0326797385621 0.0403226058552 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63647225925 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00653594771242 0.0326793684256 20% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00326797385621 0.00163938923432 199% => OK
Determiners: 0.137254901961 0.0861772015684 159% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0228758169935 0.021408717616 107% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0130718954248 0.011925033212 110% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1749.0 1933.35771543 90% => OK
No of words: 278.0 316.048096192 88% => OK
Chars per words: 6.29136690647 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20517956788 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.413669064748 0.374742101984 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.312949640288 0.28420135186 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.197841726619 0.203846283523 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.151079136691 0.137316102897 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63647225925 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.037074148 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543165467626 0.56093040696 97% => OK
Word variations: 54.6547289803 60.7387585426 90% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0891783567 75% => OK
Sentence length: 23.1666666667 20.7743622355 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0277721887 49.517814964 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.75 127.492653851 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.7743622355 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.814263465372 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 54.4616306954 49.1944974215 111% => OK
Elegance: 2.06153846154 1.69124875643 122% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435076293119 0.332605444948 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138936209311 0.102741220458 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0795340671889 0.0668466124924 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.648572628741 0.534860350844 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171865068285 0.148594505496 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.227987568881 0.134430193775 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100940713357 0.0742795772207 136% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.520243993097 0.324371583561 160% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0994560299917 0.0638462369009 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328711087704 0.228012699653 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335392524078 0.058150111329 58% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.68436873747 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.4468937876 105% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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