Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
These days, whatever we say or do is observed through a cell phone tracker and CCTV cameras, although we usually remain unaware of these moves. It is also certainly true that this invention has some beneficial effects, however, in my opinion, the detrimental impacts are much more.
To begin with the advantages, it makes us feel more secure and protect our country from foreign invaders. For instance, recording conversation among terrorist organisation or tracing them by using mobile technology help us to defend ourselves and our state. Furthermore, this technology is used by security agencies to find out a kidnapped person or arrest a thief, whose picture is captured by the security cameras.
In contrast, because of this modern technology, our privacy has been totally lost. As, nowadays, anybody can access to our personal data by hacking into our computers, we are not safe from this harmful effects of the applications. In addition, it can be misused by many criminals, either to threaten or blackmailed common citizen. My friend, Bilal, for instance, was blackmailed by the hacker, after his family videos were hacked from his laptop. Finally, I would argue, no one his right to record someone’s call or videoed him/her without his/her knowledge. Therefore, there should be a control on the use of these applications, so that I would not harm any human being.
In conclusion, Monitoring individuals without their knowledge could be necessary for defensive purposes. However, this technology could be used wrongly by some criminals and could become offensive. As a result, it should be used fairly and with some restriction by specific departments not by everyone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24814814815 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90854896202 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.67037037037 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.0634661183 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.214285714 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8571428571 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210338838688 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645807436205 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045521309494 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117769897277 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388652473943 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.