“Prevention is better that curve.” Out of a country’s budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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“Prevention is better that curve.” Out of a country’s budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The number of people who are constantly under medical treatments and take sick leaves has reached the magnitude which has never been in human history over the last few decades despite significant achievements in medicine at the same period. According to WHO (World Health Organization), this phenomenon can be altered if preventative measures are taken sooner rather than seeing doctors when a disease has already stroke.
The statistics, gathered by many medical organizations in different parts of the world, show that there is more chance to cure patients if they regularly go under medical screening. The screening constitutes of blood test and visiting such physicians as therapist, cardiologist, dentist, etc., who are able to detect if a patient has a disease. Moreover, doctors assure that some incurable diseases, mostly variety types of cancer, can be successfully treated in early stages if patients are frequently conducted medical screening. A young boy from Kazakhstan, for instance, received a syringe instead of long excruciating treatments of a tropical virus which he might have caught on his summer holiday in Thailand since he had given his blood for test as this procedure is mandatory before a school year. Thus, it appears that government should allocate more money to preventative measures rather than coping with treating diseases.
There are, nevertheless, problems associated with preventative measures. The first issue refers to young citizens of a country as it is common that people aged between 20 and 40 less worry about health. Physicians acknowledge that the first symptoms of most diseases appear exactly in those ages owing to stressful lifestyle and deteriorated environment; however, young people either neglect them or fail to notice due to relatively stronger immune system. Therefore, when those people become senior the symptoms get severer and can even transform into chronic illnesses. Also, people usually fail to have time to see doctors due to the fact that they are too busy at workplace. For example, my uncle realizes he has to undergo medical screening once half a year, although, he frequently postpones screening at a local hospital owing to his intense work schedule and business trips.
It is better to prevent illness than treating it. Thus, government should increase its expenditure on preventative measures and health education in order to decrease morbidity; otherwise, there seems to be more ill individuals than healthy ones in the future.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37404580153 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86144732419 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628498727735 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.3570481916 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.8 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118773087276 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453041450892 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506194899619 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0790719868264 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355832482352 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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