In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard on their studies.
what do you think are the causes of this?
what solutions can you suggest?
nowadays, dedicated hard work during academic phase of life - is accountable for the shining future. Nevertheless, some traditionalists claim that as a result of this race, the young people lakes from the leisure time are other activities. To my mind, today's stiff competitional world and our culture upbringing are majorly affected factors in order to make someone, especially youngers, to work hard. However, many right directional approaches can address these concerns effectively.
to begin with, our cultural notions, such as, "we born to win - in Australia" or our parents hammering forces the young people to work hard in educational life rather than think about leisure time. Not just this, sometimes, our inner enthusiasm make someone to work hard in the earlier life. Consider, for example, the research has borne out by the Indian Education Center, as 70% Indian students spend the 6 days a week towards an educational learning. So, our cultural aspects of greatly responsible for doing so for young people
On a practical note, good grades and distinction in former educational standards can only make someone able to appear for further education or ,even in, good company interviews.Eventually, to fulfill today's practical requirement of the professional world or top universities, studying hard become an essential for the youngers.
Logically, the educational institutions and society can work as a joint-venture to address these concerns effectively. By this I mean to say, the community - especially parents - must focus also on sports activities or other recreational once. Additionally, the learning schools can introduce subjects such as, music, painting so on in the school curriculum. As consequences of these, younger people may have an exposure to the leisure time with arable activities.
In a nutshell, the cited evidence supports my view that, in spite of today's need to run in order to earn their living and for prosperity endowment, everyone must have to manage leisure time. in the future, the aforementioned steps may prove as seeds for allocation of free time in the younger's life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eeds for allocation of free time in the youngers life.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'i mean', 'such as', 'as a result', 'in spite of', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25706940874 0.247107183377 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.102827763496 0.155533422707 66% => OK
Adjectives: 0.115681233933 0.0946595960268 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0642673521851 0.0501214627716 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.025706940874 0.0437548338989 59% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123393316195 0.122226691241 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0154241645244 0.0403226058552 38% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.16954231205 2.80594681477 113% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0385604113111 0.0326793684256 118% => OK
Particles: 0.0025706940874 0.00163938923432 157% => OK
Determiners: 0.0874035989717 0.0861772015684 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0205655526992 0.021408717616 96% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.011925033212 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2131.0 1933.35771543 110% => OK
No of words: 337.0 316.048096192 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.3234421365 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20517956788 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.376854599407 0.374742101984 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.305637982196 0.28420135186 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225519287834 0.203846283523 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.160237388724 0.137316102897 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16954231205 2.80594681477 113% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.037074148 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596439169139 0.56093040696 106% => OK
Word variations: 68.4160124063 60.7387585426 113% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0891783567 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0714285714 20.7743622355 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.7098373055 49.517814964 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.214285714 127.492653851 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0714285714 20.7743622355 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.928571428571 0.814263465372 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.99599198397 175% => OK
Readability: 54.635226791 49.1944974215 111% => OK
Elegance: 2.05333333333 1.69124875643 121% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321327076655 0.332605444948 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0812340882789 0.102741220458 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0682527751242 0.0668466124924 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.545448977398 0.534860350844 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.178933056249 0.148594505496 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131934445 0.134430193775 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581245859975 0.0742795772207 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.281702958292 0.324371583561 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0480387683577 0.0638462369009 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208943513818 0.228012699653 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049079558929 0.058150111329 84% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.68436873747 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.41683366733 146% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.4468937876 134% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.