Some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for charity, improving the neighbourhood, teaching sport to younger children ? Agree disagree

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Some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for charity, improving the neighbourhood, teaching sport to younger children ? Agree disagree

It has been contentious issue since decades that high schools should introduce voluntary community services, like working with charitable groups or sports teaching etc, as a compulsory subject. I personally agree with the idea that secondary school should offer such schemes that promote the youngster to play a distinctive role and contribute to the well being of society.

Young peoples are the asset of any society and they play a vital role in society. So, such type of community services really help them to make more organised and better person of society.These plans could encourage them to work as a team which tend to gain some work experience which is far more important than theoretical learning.Furthermore,it may give a good impression on their CV ,for future job.They might show more respect towards work and money that it is hard to earn money which hopefully leads them to value money and they spend it in more practical way.

Proceed my argument further, it is a wonderful idea to keep youngster busy. Unfortunately, we don't have many after school clubs, in turn, teenagers getting bore and came up with silly ideas that is dangerous for themselves but these services might help to keep themselves busy and to indulge in society and their issues and came up with rational ideas for the productive society.In addition,they might get the chance to broaden their horizon as these programmes would definitely produce better, sensible and kind person for society.

In conclusion, I agree with idea that school should offer unpaid voluntary activities to youngsters for their betterment.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, may, really, second, so, well, as for, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16858237548 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88910738322 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613026819923 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 159.286803327 49.4020404114 322% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 192.714285714 106.682146367 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.2857142857 20.7667163134 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8571428571 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209143338415 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968855053256 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662583332829 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138954288354 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053882028689 0.056905535591 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 13.0946893788 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 10.7795591182 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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