some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies Which opinion do you agree with

Essay topics:

some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with?

Recently, opinions are divided as to whether physical exercise should be a compulsory subject of every school day or it should be abandoned for academic studies. From my point of view, I side with the first idea for some reasons as follows.
First and foremost, doing physical exercise is extremely helpful to students' health. Sport has long been considered a vital role in maintaining physical health and preventing countless diseases such as obesity and diabetes. Therefore, doing exercise everyday may help students avoid health problems.
Secondly, moderate physical exercise can make pupils learn more effectively and efficiently. There are numbers of researches indicating that exercise can improve students' memory and ability. Also, taking up sports temporarily remove their attention, thus, high stress level in study will be reduced.
Opponents may argue that students are able to take up exercise at home, which is more convenient and in more personalized condition. This assertion, however, neglects the probability that they can be very busy with their homework and housework. Therefore, doing physical exercise during school time will assure that all students recieve that same amount of time spent for this subject.
In summary, it cannot be denied that physical exercise does good to students in nummerous aspects. Thus, it should be required at school without reservation.

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Average: 5.8 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Recently, opinions are divided as to whether physical exercise should be a compulsor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as to, in summary, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1179.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 214.0 315.596192385 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50934579439 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70282975259 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644859813084 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7980111082 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.6923076923 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4615384615 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31524477695 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106517626888 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984274591841 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174999454975 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0948153824884 0.056905535591 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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