Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed if they are used as money making attractions aimed at tourists Others however believe that is the only way to save these traditions Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed if they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others, however, believe that is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is undoubted that nowadays cultural tour is becoming pervading among tourists. However, whether it is a positive trend or not remains a controversial issue. While I admit that utilizing cultural conventions to attract more tourists and make some money can to some extent prevent it from eliminating , I believe there are still better ways to protect our traditions.

On the one had, we have to admit that it is a measure to attracted more public awareness. Since some traditions have already been neglected due to the rapid development of modern society, we have to take steps to hook more audiences on cultural traditions. In this way, they can be known and remembered by the public. Moreover, financial profits gained can also help to develop or maintain a certain local convention. A good example is the Lion Dancing in China -- a conventional folk dance which has been promoted by chargeable performances.

On the other hand, it can also bring detrimental effect, thus, other reliable measures should be taken to save the cultural traditions. The cultural conventions are frequently adapted to satisfy and cater to the taste of modern people to maximize their profits. A potential danger is that gradually theses traditions will become simply products of modern demands of entertainment, which is merely another form of disappearance. Meanwhile, to better protect the traditions, it is the government that should take the initial responsibility. Laws should be released; Students should be inculcated with the concept of various conventions and a consciousness to prevent them from being destroyed. Ultimately, efforts from other parts of the society are also pivotal. For instance, entrepreneurs can set off funds or social activities to offer a support; Social medias should put more focus on the traditions ignored.

By way of conclusion, although making cultural traditions profitable attractions can save them from some respect, the potential danger should by no means be ignored and there are certainly more reliable ways for this. In fact, it is imperative for us to combine powers of all sectors of the society to save our precious conventions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'while', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20365535248 0.247107183377 82% => OK
Verbs: 0.193211488251 0.155533422707 124% => OK
Adjectives: 0.104438642298 0.0946595960268 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0496083550914 0.0501214627716 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0469973890339 0.0437548338989 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0992167101828 0.122226691241 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0522193211488 0.0403226058552 130% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.00637204774 2.80594681477 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0469973890339 0.0326793684256 144% => OK
Particles: 0.00261096605744 0.00163938923432 159% => OK
Determiners: 0.088772845953 0.0861772015684 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0339425587467 0.021408717616 159% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00783289817232 0.011925033212 66% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2165.0 1933.35771543 112% => OK
No of words: 348.0 316.048096192 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.22126436782 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.39367816092 0.374742101984 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.316091954023 0.28420135186 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.229885057471 0.203846283523 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.152298850575 0.137316102897 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00637204774 2.80594681477 107% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.037074148 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.56093040696 101% => OK
Word variations: 63.6120821136 60.7387585426 105% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0891783567 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.4705882353 20.7743622355 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6856765483 49.517814964 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.352941176 127.492653851 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.7743622355 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.814263465372 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 52.0797836376 49.1944974215 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.22522522523 1.69124875643 72% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297134172927 0.332605444948 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0929860771955 0.102741220458 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0772726060576 0.0668466124924 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.495159804892 0.534860350844 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123907958149 0.148594505496 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110871365571 0.134430193775 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548458447371 0.0742795772207 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.358820104146 0.324371583561 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0807184071621 0.0638462369009 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204934462352 0.228012699653 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285828412579 0.058150111329 49% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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