Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position.

Essay topics:

Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position.

People in different corners in the world vary from each other in terms of their own individual characteristic, personal interest and especially social relationships. Obviously, social relationship is an important part of people's lives, especially young adults that some people appreciate the significance of their family and others think that friends are more important. Personally, the family, is the most important influence on young adults for practical advices, necessary supports and ambition inspiration.
First and foremost, with the young adults, family seems to be the most important role in their lives for honest and valuable shares. Yet, some people maintain an argument that most people who are more than 20 years old and separate from their parents to stay with friends or alone are affected by their. Obviously, I partly agree with the statement that the environment where we live influences our behaviors. However, rather than other factors, only family is always bring for people valuable advices thanks to their parents' practical experiences. Clearly, at anytime, sooner or later, the parents' advices is the best choice because of their honesty and experiences. In fact, the parents have experiences the same time as young adults, so they can advise for them about anything, such as: choosing a university, leasing for an apartment, buying a new bike or motorbike and so on. On the other hand, friends are much important in people's lives, but they cannot always provide you with helpful advices because of the lack of experience. For example, if you ask your friends for what university you should apply, they can show you a list of popular university that they know or it is a current trend. In a nutshell, family is the best choice when you ask for some advices.
Secondly, it is a fact that family certainly provide you with full support in most situations. Obviously, when we were a child, our parents taught us drinking, eating, wearing and the rule of society, such as thanking and apologizing. When we grew up, the family provide us with both foods, clothes, money and especially mental supports. Although, people can spend much time with their friends or their partners for working, family is still the last place that they really come back. For example, after hard working hours, most people just want to go home and relax, have dinner and watching TV together. Moreover, in some circumstances, young adults can have troubles with money, even a large amount of money. Obviously, friends or even the best friends, can provide them with financial supports, but it is not enough that their parents have to be responsible for that. Needless to say, in most situations, nothing can replace the family in the role of support with the young adults.
For all that we have discussed, many factors influence young adults, but the family is considered as the most important and principal role in their lives for they give valuable advices, provide with full supports and inspire the power ambition.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 469, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in fact, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2523.0 1615.20841683 156% => OK
No of words: 497.0 315.596192385 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07645875252 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62789138826 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48893360161 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8348257398 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.142857143 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35933950562 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117627757878 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821923732457 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250415943335 0.151304729494 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444523285845 0.056905535591 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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