Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There remains some disagreement as to whether products' success should be attributable solely to advertising hype rather than customers' demand. This issue, from my perspective, I contend that advertisements indeed have a significant influence on purchasers' selection, but they are not main reason.

First of all, for one thing, when faced with a bewildering variety of goods, we may be spoiled by choice. Advertisements, at this time, by which we are informed about the choice we have,play a irreplaceable part. We usually tend to select what have been displayed in adverts. For the another, Flashy adverts and bright packages are luring us on the account of glamorized appearance and quality of commodities. One salient example is goods specifically targeting children, such as fast food, which are marketed at a way that attracts children. Actually, pupils are easily influenced by slick adverts and adjust to pressurizing their parents into buying a pig in a poke.

Secondly, Certain companies often invite renowned and glamorous people to endorse their wares, which has successfully pointed their died-fans in the direction of buying something unnecessarily. Several consumers overly focus on a brand-image rather than the qualities and utilities of the commodities when they make a choice. Admittedly,We have to admit that publicity seems to fulfill an essential function in products' success.

But conversely, also noteworthy is the fact that purchasers actually have absolute right to choose what they really need. When they are selecting goods, purchasing-power is of the essence and a pivotal influence. If they own no enough money, they will narrow the selection of merchandise they may buy. Another crucial impact is the qualities of goods. This is imperative and vital. On this account, adverting just let you access to information about a kind of goods, but it is not a decisive impact. In conclusion, I reaffirm my position that a company's wares should succeed by virtue of word-of-mouth, rather than a blaze of publicity.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'purchasers'' or 'purchaser's'?
Suggestion: purchasers'; purchaser's
... indeed have a significant influence on purchasers selection, but they are not main reason...
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Suggestion: , play
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , We
...ties when they make a choice. Admittedly,We have to admit that publicity seems to f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, conversely, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, as to, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all, for one thing

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34782608696 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11225991834 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636645962733 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8577584722 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118204487266 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327252586756 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324872530013 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0661423415015 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262729956793 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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