We live in world of technology these days. While internet brings clear advantage. The problems in term of security of information outweighs the advantages to what extent do you agree
These days, internet play indispensable role in our society. With advancement of technology, usage of internet has become essential in order to gain success in the society.While I believe that internet have tremendous benefits, I strongly agrees that internet have some drawback such as security problems and breach informations.
Internet has various advantages. When it comes to communication, internet made social interaction faster and easier. Previously it was extremely difficult to get in touch with long distance friends and relative, but thanks to the internet that made socializing easier. Furthermore, students use internet in every aspects of life. For instance, students search new information in order to make projects, assignments and presentations. Nowadays, entrepreneur use internet in order to expand businesses and trades. Thus, we can see that internet has various benefits on the individuals and on the society.
There are some drawbacks of internet such as cybercrime. These days, cybercrime is very common in our society. Nowadays, people are using online banking for transactions, this trend may lead to stealing money or fraud. Besides, students tend to copy information from internet in order to impress their teachers. With advancement of the technology, software engineers has invented some software that control the cyber crimes and frauds. These software have ability to block or stop unusual activities, but they can not stop permanently. This clearly shows that technology has some detrimental effects.
In conclusion, in my opinion, while internet have tremendous benefits in every field including education, business and communication, it has some drawbacks too in form of cybercrime. Government could control these cybercrime by investing some money in developing the more sensitive software.
Comments
well, in my opinion,
well, in my opinion, statement is not about advantages and disadvantages. It is asking for a opinion i.e. to favour one side and talk about it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...in order to gain success in the society.While I believe that internet have tremendous...
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'agree'
Suggestion: agree
...et have tremendous benefits, I strongly agrees that internet have some drawback such a...
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Line 6, column 437, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this software' or 'These softwares'?
Suggestion: This software; These softwares
...at control the cyber crimes and frauds. These software have ability to block or stop unusual a...
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Line 8, column 36, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... In conclusion, in my opinion, while internet have tremendous benefits in eve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7619047619 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10413572556 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575091575092 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.0619500614 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3888888889 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1666666667 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171720273982 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554923577233 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358028829053 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104799640755 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366875106046 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.54 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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