What are the benefits and drawbacks of keeping animals in zoos

Essay topics:

What are the benefits and drawbacks of keeping animals in zoos.

It is true that more and more zoos have been erecting all over the world in many recent years, resusting in vigorous debate whether this is the positive tendency. In my opinion, while offering numerous evident benefits, drawbacks could overshadow in the long run.

On the one hand, there are two main advantages stemming from opening more zoos. Firstly, more profit could be generated, meaning that this amount of money would be donated partially in organisations which play an important role in protecting animals such as PETA, the largest organisation in the world. Therefore, the more money patronized from zoo activities, the more efficiency these organisations could operate. Secondly, it is fair to say that zoo could draw residents attention. It means that authorities, consequently, could make the most of this to teach inhabitants how to preserve and appreciate nature. As a result, thanks to zoo activities, humankind would an deeper insights into animal kingdom and be willing to be involved more in animal protection activities.

On the other hand, I would argue that these above-mentioned benefits could be overshadowed by the tangible and severe drawbacks, which negatively affect on not only animal behaviours, but also fall them prey to mental diseases. It is evident that zoos would, inevitably, preclude animal natural behaviour patterns, giving rise to many underlying repercussions. Overdependence, for instance, could be the major problem of such captive animals. They have been acclimatized to convenient life which they enjoy in zoos so that they have almost lost all survival skills when it comes to living in natural habitats. Thereafter, such animals could not adapt tp natural environment if they are released from zoo cages. Additionally, it is wrong to say that zoos are ideal places to provide shelters for extinct species due to the fact that a majority of zoos have beeb exploiting other animals, which are not endangered, just because of profit. Such captive-bred species, as a consequence, would suffer from psychological problems or even self-destructive behaviours like bar-bitting and self-mutilation if they live in such cages without freedom.

In conclusion, it seems to me that capturing animals in zoos could bring various disadvantages, which would overshadow these benefits.

Votes
Average: 7.5 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41046831956 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0825621547 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592286501377 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0573226717 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.75 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0941494584409 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329651011882 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348047929718 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0554843883675 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116702563645 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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