Write about the following topic:
Celebrities such as singers and fi lm stars earn too much money, buy too many goods
and care too little about other people.
To what extent do you think this is true?
Should anything be done to change the situation?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Some people think that famous stars like musician and movies actors have high earnings, get many things and care very less about their fans. I partially agree with the statement and believe many things can be done to change this trend.
It’s a fact that most of film stars and singers earn a handsome amount of money. In addition, they can buy almost anything they want. However, although apparently they look rude and behave like that do not care about ordinary people but actually they do care. First of all, these individuals are gifted with extra-ordinary talent and they worked very hard to reach this status. After struggling for years one become able to gets a high pay, to fulfill all his necessities. Therefore, what look so simple is actually not that easy to achieve.
Although, externally these individuals look careless most of the time it is not so. Since, famous stars face many problems in general public thus they pretend not to be caring. For example, they cannot talk or walk freely in public places, as they are surrounded by fans. Moreover, there are a lot of security issues faced by them. To avoid such issues they appear to be rude and arrogant.
As high class celebrities are compelled to behave like egoistic and selfish person because of these hurdles. Therefore, there must be some strategies to solve them. Both the government and general public can deal with them very easily. Such as, it is responsibility of state to protect them and make a safe surrounding. In addition, general public need to behave in a gentle and organized manner with them. As a result celebrities will feel secure and stress free in friendly environment. So they will try to change their attitude toward public and their fans.
In a nutshell, high earning of celebrities are due to their hard work and talent. So no one should have any objection to it. However, we can change egoistic and selfish way of dealing by providing safe and friendly surrounding.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'apparently', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in general', 'such as', 'as a result', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.177248677249 0.247107183377 72% => OK
Verbs: 0.164021164021 0.155533422707 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.116402116402 0.0946595960268 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0767195767196 0.0501214627716 153% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0661375661376 0.0437548338989 151% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.116402116402 0.122226691241 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0238095238095 0.0403226058552 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.51205036672 2.80594681477 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0396825396825 0.0326793684256 121% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0555555555556 0.0861772015684 64% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0238095238095 0.021408717616 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0026455026455 0.011925033212 22% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1995.0 1933.35771543 103% => OK
No of words: 338.0 316.048096192 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90236686391 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20517956788 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334319526627 0.374742101984 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.207100591716 0.28420135186 73% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.153846153846 0.203846283523 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.094674556213 0.137316102897 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51205036672 2.80594681477 90% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.037074148 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550295857988 0.56093040696 98% => OK
Word variations: 59.6327845568 60.7387585426 98% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0891783567 143% => OK
Sentence length: 14.6956521739 20.7743622355 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.9561666509 49.517814964 48% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7391304348 127.492653851 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6956521739 20.7743622355 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.739130434783 0.814263465372 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.99599198397 225% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 35.4057113455 49.1944974215 72% => OK
Elegance: 1.03448275862 1.69124875643 61% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244772101692 0.332605444948 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0849598596003 0.102741220458 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0591738827409 0.0668466124924 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.445568549964 0.534860350844 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.11261725649 0.148594505496 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808909842867 0.134430193775 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433296232611 0.0742795772207 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.303415797124 0.324371583561 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0685757238156 0.0638462369009 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156566110625 0.228012699653 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042432032111 0.058150111329 73% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.68436873747 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 10.4468937876 153% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.