Altered IELTS In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
For generations in many countries young adults have been encouraged to take a gap year after high school. Below merits and drawbacks of the prospect will be discussed in details.
On the one hand, there are several benefits of the tradition. Firstly, studying at high school and preparation for the final exams is challenging and difficult. In fact, many students are so exhausted that they may have a nervous breakdown. Many psychologists suggest having a journey as a proper medicine to the problem. Thus, those who decide to spend a year on travelling will surely get rested and revitalized by the new experience. Secondly, some young individuals do not have needed financial resources to pay for studying at university. One year gap gives them a possibility to earn and save up some money. In fact, a person who has been working intensively for twelve months in a row may make enough money to start tertiary education. Those are several benefits that are acquired via having a year gap.
On the other hand, there are some disadvantages as well. For example, a person who became financially independent will probably detest the idea of giving it up for studying. Statistics shows that the majority of those who began working after school have never pursued a degree and a likely reason to this is that living on your own, being free from parents’ rules is an awesome experience. Secondly, having the long one-year vocation may have a negative impact on students’ academic records. For instance, young adults who did not take a gap year are more likely to graduate from university than those who took it. It seems that to study successfully a person should be able to recall a lot of information from a school program and the data is well-remembered by those who went from school to university directly and forgotten by those who had a long vacation. Those are a few negative facets of the custom.
In conclusion, the custom of having a year vocation between school and university has some drawbacks and merits and each person has a right to decide what is better for him or her.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Unique words percentage is still low:
Unique words percentage: 0.523676880223 0.561755894193 93%
when the Unique words percentage is less than the average, the mark will be less than 7.0.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1687 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.699 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.664 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.419 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85793871866 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80629574627 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523676880223 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4017614049 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7894736842 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295223383242 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853204590585 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717786502557 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196567625991 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01564934803 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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