The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I think a person who has earned a lot of money is not always a successful one because money doesn’t show whether a person is successful or not. Success depends on many other factors

First example is of our beloved Prophet Hazrat Muhammad (SAW) He didn’t earn a lot of money in His lifetime but He is the most successful person in the history of mankind. He earned lot of fame & respect so it’s proven that success doesn’t depend upon earning money.

A person who has earned a lot of money can provide all the luxuries & comforts of life to his children but he can’t give the love & time that his children needs because he remains busy in earning money so he can’t extract time for his family, friends & relatives. For example we can see our political leaders who remain busy in their work although they have too much money but they can’t give time to their families.

A successful person is the one who can give attention to his family, can take rest and can enjoy with his family. As we all know the richest man of the world is Bill Gates but in my point of view he is not the most successful one because he works like a machine and can’t even waste one minute of his life so what can money do if he can’t give important attention & golden time to his family which they need more than money or anything else.

Money can’t buy happiness & health for anyone so I think money is of no need if an earner can’t attend the happiness & sorrows of his Family.

One more example is that of the criminals and thieves. Although they have lot of money, we can’t say that they are successful ones so in my point of view money doesn’t make a man successful but success can make a man rich.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'for example', 'i think']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.258397932817 0.247107183377 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.149870801034 0.155533422707 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0594315245478 0.0946595960268 63% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0284237726098 0.0501214627716 57% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0981912144703 0.0437548338989 224% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.113695090439 0.122226691241 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0103359173127 0.0403226058552 26% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.52361249755 2.80594681477 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0103359173127 0.0326793684256 32% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0594315245478 0.0861772015684 69% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0387596899225 0.021408717616 181% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0206718346253 0.011925033212 173% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1750.0 1933.35771543 91% => OK
No of words: 322.0 316.048096192 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4347826087 6.12580529183 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20517956788 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.285714285714 0.374742101984 76% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.217391304348 0.28420135186 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.124223602484 0.203846283523 61% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0900621118012 0.137316102897 66% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52361249755 2.80594681477 90% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.037074148 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44099378882 0.56093040696 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.5520214328 60.7387585426 72% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0891783567 62% => OK
Sentence length: 32.2 20.7743622355 155% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.0967129532 49.517814964 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.0 127.492653851 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2 20.7743622355 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.814263465372 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 53.9391304348 49.1944974215 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.38317757009 1.69124875643 82% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226448430071 0.332605444948 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.203126222386 0.102741220458 198% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0854978398246 0.0668466124924 128% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.719616246313 0.534860350844 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.213488579565 0.148594505496 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126394432018 0.134430193775 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623158160195 0.0742795772207 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.349620170425 0.324371583561 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0742498013112 0.0638462369009 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148963431629 0.228012699653 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549170345366 0.058150111329 94% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.90881763527 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.4468937876 77% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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