Marketing and promotion is the key to a sucessful business. To what extent do you agree

Essay topics:

Marketing and promotion is the key to a sucessful business.
To what extent do you agree

My writing
In this comparative world, where the number of companies of all kind is growing up, the more popular they are, the more people buy their products. So that, advertisement plays an crucial role in the process of making the bussiness succesfully. From my point of view, the main point decide a company will succeed or not depend on its products’ quality.

First of all, we cannot deny that it is necessary to have the great maketing and promotion in order to introduce the products to the numberous people. The company has a myriad of ways to increase the popularity of their products such as: by contribute the campaign or competition to confirmed their position, by using famous and trusted people.

Secondly, on the other hand, the quality need to be put priorty over all because the first thing everybody judge is how good the goods is. If they can build the belief in the customers,day by day, they can have the certain number of close people who put their trust on them and also make the new ones can buy their amount without consideration.

Finally, moreover, the company can compete with others in the products’uses. It is not only necessary to keep perfecting the qualities, but also widen the fuction. It is obvious that the more convenience the products can bring, the more people will choose to buy.

In conclusion, like a customer, evreybody always have two main priorties are the qualitiy and the uses of products. Then , they will put the number of people who buy it into consideration.

Votes
Average: 4 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1273.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85877862595 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81723648429 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580152671756 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9728748387 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.083333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00849584249049 0.244688304435 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00359249895666 0.084324248473 4% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.011914971099 0.0667982634062 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00522459355485 0.151304729494 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104491871097 0.056905535591 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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