Small businesses should avoid recruiting young women who do not have their own family in order to avoid paying maternity leave later on To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Small businesses should avoid recruiting young women who do not have their own family in order to avoid paying maternity leave later on.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are many criteria to be considered for recruitment process, some of which is the gender and age of the candidate. Some argue that recruiters from the small firm should avoid a girl without child or prospective mother to decrease cost on the maternity leaves, while I believe they should hire equal number of applicants from each group of age and gender.

There are some bases of the view for not hiring a girl or a lady without child. Firstly, when they go on a long leave, they need to be paid without any work which could not be feasible for corporation with limited workforce. For example, it would definitely hamper the business if one goes on leave from 6 employees. Secondly, after having a child, her efficiency would be adversely affected owing to the dual responsibilities of the child and the family. For instance, she may take further leaves for the regular check up of her infant or could not extend the working hours. Thus, such leaves would certainly affect the small company.

However, it seems to me that benefits of hiring young generation could alleviate these harms on the trade. Firstly, salary of a fresher is far less than the highly experience professional, so hiring novice could diminish the cost on human resources. For example, two apprentices could be hired instead of one expert. Secondly, research has shown that recently passed out graduates could brainstorm better ideas than the experienced one. For instance, recently passed out computer engineers have much more knowledge of newer technologies; specifically young girls possess higher ambitions regarding her career and job.

To conclude, I believe that that the hirer should not consider cost on maternity leave for long-run business rather than short term benefits. Young girls who constitute more than fifty percent of the skilled workers could contribute for success of the small enterprise by providing new ideas and insights which are essential for newly established enterprise.

Votes
Average: 8 (12 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.23595505618 0.247107183377 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.137640449438 0.155533422707 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0898876404494 0.0946595960268 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.061797752809 0.0501214627716 123% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0337078651685 0.0437548338989 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.148876404494 0.122226691241 122% => OK
Participles: 0.0365168539326 0.0403226058552 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.68305400029 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0168539325843 0.0326793684256 52% => OK
Particles: 0.00561797752809 0.00163938923432 343% => OK
Determiners: 0.0870786516854 0.0861772015684 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0393258426966 0.021408717616 184% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0140449438202 0.011925033212 118% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1986.0 1933.35771543 103% => OK
No of words: 324.0 316.048096192 103% => OK
Chars per words: 6.12962962963 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20517956788 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.358024691358 0.374742101984 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.265432098765 0.28420135186 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203703703704 0.203846283523 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135802469136 0.137316102897 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68305400029 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.037074148 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598765432099 0.56093040696 107% => OK
Word variations: 68.0043299545 60.7387585426 112% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.6 20.7743622355 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.676911695 49.517814964 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.4 127.492653851 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7743622355 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.933333333333 0.814263465372 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 48.1432098765 49.1944974215 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.80722891566 1.69124875643 107% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122437395451 0.332605444948 37% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0974570405012 0.102741220458 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0594382551132 0.0668466124924 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.519898074782 0.534860350844 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134212146179 0.148594505496 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514111807109 0.134430193775 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407216105358 0.0742795772207 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.33676242966 0.324371583561 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0385414895294 0.0638462369009 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0910061185793 0.228012699653 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246750587465 0.058150111329 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.41683366733 146% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.90881763527 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 1.9629258517 204% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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