In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

For generations in many countries young adults have been encouraged to take a gap year after high school. Below merits and drawbacks of the prospect will be discussed in details.

On the one hand, there are several benefits of the tradition. Firstly, studying at high school and preparation for the final exams is challenging and difficult. In fact, many students are so exhausted that they may have a nervous breakdown. Many psychologists suggest having a journey as a proper medicine to the problem. Thus, those who decide to spend a year on travelling will surely get rested and revitalized by the new experience; their mental health and souls will be cured and energized. Secondly, some young individuals do not have needed financial resources to pay for studying at university. One year gap gives them a possibility to earn and save up some money. In fact, a person who has been working intensively for twelve months in a row may make enough money to start tertiary education. Finally, some pupils do not make their minds about the future and having a long vacation or working for a while could considerably help them in making a right decision. Those are several benefits that are acquired via having a year gap.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages as well. For an instance, a person who tried a taste of financial independence will probably detest the idea of giving it up for studying. In fact, statistics shows that a large number of those who begin working after school will never pursue a degree and a likely reason to this is that living on your own, being free from parents’ rules is an awesome experience. Secondly, having the long one-year vocation may have a negative impact on students’ academic records. In fact, those who did not take a gap year are more likely to graduate from university than those who took it. One possible explanation is that successful studying requires to remember a lot of information from a school program and it is well-remembered by those who went from school to university directly and forgotten by those who had a long vacation. Those are a few negative facets of taking a year rest.

In conclusion, the custom of having a year vocation between school and university has some drawbacks and merits and each person has a right to decide what is better for him or her.

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Average: 7.1 (3 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...tudying. In fact, statistics shows that a large number of those who begin working after school wi...
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Line 5, column 700, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'remembering'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: remembering
...on is that successful studying requires to remember a lot of information from a school prog...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82630272953 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77908321421 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511166253102 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.702010932 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.25 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.15 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293739027898 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835972992438 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667298324111 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196722868989 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276825861786 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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flaws:
Unique words percentage is low:

Unique words percentage: 0.511166253102 0.561755894193 91%

sentences are not developed efficiently. for example: there are a lot of '...those who...'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 1884 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.675 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.52 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.449 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5