Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experien

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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

Other parents wanted to buy their kids a large number of toys to play with. In this essay I will provide examples for the advantage like kids will be educated and feel loved while the disadvantages will be like kids will be spoiled and feel unloved.

In my opinion, first the advantage having many toys feels really good, same thing goes to other children. When your mom and dad gives you, want you want especially toys you will feel that they love you. Secondly, if your parents buy many toys like educational toys for example puzzles, the advantage is kids can enhance their solving skills that they can use in their lives. Lastly, they can enjoy their childhood life because they can play different kind of toys. However, with those advantages, there is still disadvantages like if you are a parent and you provide all toys or many toys to your kids, they will be a spoiled brat. They will get used to it and dont want to settle for one. As well as if the time comes that you cannot buy toys anymore, they will feel unloved and worthless because you cannot provide many toys like they used to. Also, they will not consider your feelings as a parent because kids still cannot understand some points in our lives.

In my conclusion, if I will be a parent someday, I will still provide and buy toys for my kids but it is only limited. So that they will not get used to have many toys. Also, there is a saying that too much and too less can harm you, so we should balance everything not to be too much and too less.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 40, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
Other parents wanted to buy their kids a large number of toys to play with. In this essay I will...
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Line 3, column 662, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...iled brat. They will get used to it and dont want to settle for one. As well as if t...
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Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...oys for my kids but it is only limited. So that they will not get used to have many toy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, kind of, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1238.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37455830389 5.12529762239 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.14827040648 2.80592935109 77% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462897526502 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 381.6 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5397022143 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2307692308 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233766849389 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108124857351 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943745368349 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157209989957 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623673528874 0.056905535591 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 50.2224549098 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 12.4159519038 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.74 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 78.4519038076 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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