Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
We have two groups of people have different point of views, the first group believe the goal of university education is to support graduaters for having suitable jobs, and the second group believe that there are enormous of advantages when completing higher education either for matures or community. Therefore, I will discuss here the two perspectives in details as following;
First of all, the first group who find out that continuing up university education gives more opportunities for obtaining jobs which it relates to the field which they have studied at the universty. Recently, students are aware of selecting what to study in the university, as each student has different interest in such field. For example, some students go through labour market requirments, so that they study a field which it is possibly to be paid more wages in the market, which it has also constant vacancies to avoid unemployment features. However, they look for a workplace where they can achieve comfortness and relaxation environment. In addition, they like to work in an environment where open minded people work. As it could be counted as self advantage relates to the person himself or herself only.
And the second view, there are a group of people believe that finishing university eduation, it will be there a kind of mutual benefits for individuals and the society as well, because a country needs to have different professions in different fields. For example, it is important that the country should have doctor practioners whicg it is an essential part that it should be existed in it, when people got sick, they will have to visit the doctor to diagnose one's case and prescribe for them the medicine to be cured from a certain type of disease. In addition, community requires teachers to teach other pupils. However, when graduaters focus only to study specific fileds, certainly it will cause lack of professions in the society. As a result, we can see some organisations have shortage of employees, they can not find people to work with them. It really happened in some countries with the ministry of education, they could not find teachers to hire them, because there no one apply for it due to the weakness of salaries.
I think, education does not involve individuals for achieving their goals only, but the society has to have a balance between all majors to fulfill needs of society for the best of the conutry.
In brief, it is very necessary to make a parallel in professions for the purpose of having a better society not only to look for self interest, because we are part of the community, we should take care of this point.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'groups'?
Suggestion: groups
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, really, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in brief, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 448.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91294642857 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70426571425 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502232142857 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.10420841683 428% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.7642080691 49.4020404114 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.733333333 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8666666667 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197133837619 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060896348724 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595340665629 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11139769296 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567674377641 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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