Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time.Do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

Essay topics:

Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

Some other people believes that during children's free time should not be a complete waste of time instead it must be educational. With regards to this in my own opinion, I do both agree and disagree. First I agreed because childrens must learn educational things while they are still young. Disagree, because eventhough they are children they must also enjoy being a kid.

I agree that children's leisure time must be educational and not a complete waste of time, it is because when they learn or study educational things they can use it on their future needs. For example when they are always studying about shapes and when they will go to school and had some recitation they can answer the shapes that their teacher might ask, and their teacher might commend the child for being smart.

As I state earlier, I do disagree too. It is because even though they must learn educational things during their free time, we must not forget that they are still children. They must enjoy, play, entertain theirselves and also they must have a rest or have free time to do what they want to do being a child or a kid. Even though they have free time, and have some rest and just sits inside or outside of their house, the kid or child can be observant, they can see and listen what are the things that her moms do or his or her family doing. They can also imitate all the the things and attitude that they saw. In addition to it they are still young and they can still learn new things during their leisure time, so it will not be a completely waste of their time.

I therefor conclude that eventhough childrens must learn educational things and not waste their time, we must not forget also that we all come to the point that even though we play we can still learn new things during our free time and still it is not a complete waste of our time because we are still learning new things not just only educational learnings.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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...family doing. They can also imitate all the the things and attitude that they saw. In a...
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Message: You used an adverb ('completely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('waste') instead of another adjective.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, so, still, while, for example, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 7.85571142285 280% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 24.0651302605 258% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47578347578 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19981396944 2.80592935109 78% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.381766381766 0.561755894193 68% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.4602268596 49.4020404114 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.846153846 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23076923077 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27140492073 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13599911275 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684469662292 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200482738839 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076259566082 0.056905535591 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.45 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.51 8.58950901804 76% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 78.4519038076 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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