Some people believe it is better for children to grow up in the city while others say it is better to grow up in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The shocking phenomenon of children development has only recently come to the forefront. Some feel that children should grow up in the countryside, as it is good for their healthy development. However, I agree with those who say that children should foster up in the city itself. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both beliefs as well as proffer rationale for my own viewpoint on this matter.

Regarding those who feel that children should grow up in the countryside, there exist valid reason the main justification is that in cities children do not get enough time for physical activities. They not only carry heavy workloads brimming with college preparatory classes but they huge workload of homework as well.The Harvard reported just last week that 80% of students who lives outside the city are more down to earth and hard working and participate more in the wide variety of extra curriculum activities.

Nevertheless, I cannot hold that opinion in good conscious. The fact is that children who grow up in the city are more advanced in terms of technological advancement. In Portland, for instance, 100,000 achieved noble prize in the different area of technological, medical & teaching. The Stanford reported that children of Portland proved that development in the city is more productive in comparison to the countryside.

In sum, if everyone put a moratorium on a belief that countryside developed children perform better can bring change and pitches in, normal people like others & I can bring change. I hope that soon everyone understands the children development and give their contribution in their foster up process.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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...variety of extra curriculum activities. Nevertheless, I cannot hold that opinion...
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...ontribution in their foster up process.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, well, for instance, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2276119403 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96597994549 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585820895522 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6937338463 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.75 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326670551106 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11373550703 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804160500096 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181047861574 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05663139168 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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