Some people believe that schools should only teach children subjects which are beneficial for their future career and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people believe that schools should only teach children subjects which are beneficial for their future career and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Countries in different corners of the world vary from each other in terms of their own education systems and their concentration on specific fields in education the young generation. In lots of areas, people strongly believe that children should only be taught academic disciplines which are beneficial for them in the future and thus, other subjects such as sports and music are underestimated. Personally, while I agree that academic and professional subjects are the top priority for a student, I would say that music and sports are also extremely beneficial and should continue to be incorporated at schools.
On the one hand, there is a variety of reason why learning subjects that guarantee a successful future career are pivotal in the field of education. First, those subjects equip learners with higher-level qualifications and boost their work performance, which is what most employers expect these days. Math sharpens calculation ability and logical thinking while liberal arts subjects like literature assist in users’ fluency in communication, and all these prove essential qualities in the future work place. Furthermore, the job market is becoming increasingly competitive as hundreds of applicants often chase the top jobs and expertise related to one’s field of specialization remains the key element to success. For example, in Vietnam, students who graduated with an engineering degree are highly paid and have an easy time pursuing a good job rather than music teachers of athletes.
On the other hand, I would argue that the value of subjects such as music and sports should be not underestimated. Firstly, these subjects can help children develop physically and mentally. In fact, sports can help students boost their strength and flexibility while music can be considered as a way to improve the spiritual life of learners. Secondly, children differ from each other in their own expectations and individual talents, therefore, ignoring teaching sports and music at school can dampen student’s enthusiasm. For instance, going to school to learn only science or social subjects like math or history can gradually tedious for students who are talented at music or sports and expect to become artists or athletes in the future.
As discussed, apart from teaching intellectual disciplines, no one can deny the significance of other subjects such as music or sports because of their benefits for students’ comprehensive development.

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Average: 7.4 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 384.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4453125 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05496943854 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546875 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.7803415349 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.357142857 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4285714286 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3571428571 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36896920365 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131946176582 0.084324248473 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948773954064 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230139333996 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783596831556 0.056905535591 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 9.78957915832 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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