Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.
Do you agree or disagree?
Many young people work on a volunteer basis, and this can only be beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. However, I do not agree that we should therefore force all teenagers to do unpaid work.
Most young people are already under enough pressure with their studies, without being given the added responsibility of working in their spare time. School is just as demanding as a full-time job, and teachers expect their students to do homework and exam revision on top of attending lessons every day. When young people do have some free time, we should encourage them to enjoy it with their friends or to spend it doing sports and other leisure activities. They have many years of work ahead of them when they finish their studies.
At the same time, I do not believe that society has anything to gain from obliging young people to do unpaid work. In fact, I would argue that it goes against the values of a free and fair society to force a group of people to do something against their will. Doing this can only lead to resentment amongst young people, who would feel that they were being used, and parents, who would not want to be told how to raise their children? Currently, nobody is forced to volunteer, and this is surely the best system.
In conclusion, teenagers may choose to work for free and help others, but in my opinion we should not make this compulsory.
Comments
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this essay was written by Simon, the examiner who everyone knows him.
how could it possibly he get 5.5 !!!!!! :D
The e-grade has different
The e-grade has different views to human beings. When there are warning messages, the e-grade will give penalties to the essay, like:
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
and finally it only get 5.5
for practice purpose, we need to follow e-grader not Simon.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... time. School is just as demanding as a full time job, and teachers expect their students...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1149.0 1615.20841683 71% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.596 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31352544831 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3432009026 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.454545455 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.472169801612 0.244688304435 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171175652223 0.084324248473 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830453399471 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280228625258 0.151304729494 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854479851369 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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