Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere
To what extend do you agree with this view ?
Although Arts is a symbol of the culture of a society, citizen considered that investing money on art would not be efficient; besides, people believe that this money should spend somewhere else. In my view, I completely disagree to neglect arts and spend the art budgets on other fields but, in many cases, education and economy are equally important as or perhaps rather essential than art and would have the higher priority if the society struggle with illiteracy and poverty.
Firstly, when the statistics show an increasing rate of illiteracy in a country, then it would be essential that government consider about spending the budget on education and its related facilities. For example, when a child has not enthusiastic about studying and eager to learn how playing music, then in long term the society have an analphabet man who cannot read the newspaper but can play instruments, therefore, he would obviously face difficulties in his life, besides, he is not able to solve any of the society's problems.
Secondly, the growth of poverty indicates that government should attend the welfare of people more than arts. For instance, people prefer spending their money on buying food rather than museum or exhibition tickets, so, in this case, the government focus on art would be a waste of money.
Totally, it means that, first of all, the basic requirements of people should be supply, and then paying attention to the arts would be helpful or somehow necessary.
In conclusion, an insignificant number of people believes that money should be spent in other fields than art. In my opinion, only in case of society weakness on meeting the basic needs of people, this view would be acceptable in other case Art is as important as other fields and is the power of a culture.
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... basic requirements of people should be supply, and then paying attention to the arts ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'first of all', 'in many cases', 'in my opinion', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.261904761905 0.247107183377 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.122023809524 0.155533422707 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.077380952381 0.0946595960268 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0684523809524 0.0501214627716 137% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0297619047619 0.0437548338989 68% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142857142857 0.122226691241 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0267857142857 0.0403226058552 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66640623728 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0119047619048 0.0326793684256 36% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0892857142857 0.0861772015684 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0386904761905 0.021408717616 181% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.014880952381 0.011925033212 125% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1787.0 1933.35771543 92% => OK
No of words: 300.0 316.048096192 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.95666666667 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356666666667 0.374742101984 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.263333333333 0.28420135186 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.196666666667 0.203846283523 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.123333333333 0.137316102897 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66640623728 2.80594681477 95% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.037074148 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556666666667 0.56093040696 99% => OK
Word variations: 58.3427538736 60.7387585426 96% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0891783567 56% => OK
Sentence length: 33.3333333333 20.7743622355 160% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5745516632 49.517814964 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 198.555555556 127.492653851 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.3333333333 20.7743622355 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 0.814263465372 246% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 59.6666666667 49.1944974215 121% => OK
Elegance: 1.95945945946 1.69124875643 116% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335311824311 0.332605444948 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.149384857903 0.102741220458 145% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0586875297194 0.0668466124924 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.74955698239 0.534860350844 140% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133332383888 0.148594505496 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185926655796 0.134430193775 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578882507777 0.0742795772207 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.267450879638 0.324371583561 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0354848401582 0.0638462369009 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23036288781 0.228012699653 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062421179926 0.058150111329 107% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.68436873747 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41683366733 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 5.90881763527 34% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 9.0 10.4468937876 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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