There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children which encourages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks Many parents are worried that these advertisements put too much pressure on children while some advertisers claim that they provid

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There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children which encourages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks. Many parents are worried that these advertisements put too much pressure on children, while some advertisers claim that they provide useful information to children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Most advertisements are targeting children nowadays and push them to purchase products that ranges from play toys to foods. Whilst parents feel this mentally affects the children, advertisers believe they pass beneficial knowledge to the children through their advertisements. It is agreed that a large number of ads cause a detrimental impact on children as well as parents in terms of health and finance respectively. In this essay, I will discuss both the points of view before coming to a reasoned conclusion.

On the one hand, by watching the increased number of ads, children become too adamant to buy the advertised products. This is because the ads are telecast in a way that stimulate the children’s mind to buy that immediately. These overly advertised products throw harmful effects on children’s health as well as parent’s financial circumstance. For instance, Lays, a popular chips product is advertised colorfully and overly priced to attract youngsters to eat, but the Federal Drug Administration of the US does not recommend this food item and it claims these food products have greater chances to cause cancer.

On the other hand, the ad companies claim it provides benefits through their advertisement and respective products. Moreover, they argue that their innovative play toys not only boost children’s creativity, but also promotes young minds to actively involve in mathematical skills. A good illustration is that Lego which is a toy manufacturing company produces colorful building sets and bricks which make younger people to build architectures of their own tastes, thus it motivates them to bring out the talents. Although, some ads are very beneficial, most ads are misleading, and, therefore, this essay disagrees that ads provide useful information for children.

In conclusion, with the benefits of ads in some circumstances, in most places, it provides mental stress to children and their wards. Hence, I am convinced that ads mislead people, especially children and the government should regulate the ads before it is directed to the young children who do not have the requisite knowledge to think and analyze which is good and which is bad.

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Average: 7.7 (20 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...their advertisements. It is agreed that a large number of ads cause a detrimental impact on child...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'as well as', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259162303665 0.247107183377 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.17277486911 0.155533422707 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0837696335079 0.0946595960268 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0575916230366 0.0501214627716 115% => OK
Pronouns: 0.044502617801 0.0437548338989 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0942408376963 0.122226691241 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0314136125654 0.0403226058552 78% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.01043097398 2.80594681477 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0392670157068 0.0326793684256 120% => OK
Particles: 0.00261780104712 0.00163938923432 160% => OK
Determiners: 0.0942408376963 0.0861772015684 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00523560209424 0.021408717616 24% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0183246073298 0.011925033212 154% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2190.0 1933.35771543 113% => OK
No of words: 347.0 316.048096192 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.31123919308 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.397694524496 0.374742101984 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.319884726225 0.28420135186 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.236311239193 0.203846283523 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.155619596542 0.137316102897 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01043097398 2.80594681477 107% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.037074148 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576368876081 0.56093040696 103% => OK
Word variations: 64.9754148845 60.7387585426 107% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0891783567 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.7857142857 20.7743622355 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6880015772 49.517814964 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.428571429 127.492653851 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7857142857 20.7743622355 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 0.814263465372 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 56.7741869082 49.1944974215 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.4 1.69124875643 83% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306069389492 0.332605444948 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0935523228607 0.102741220458 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.058139188293 0.0668466124924 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.524230526056 0.534860350844 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.127004549243 0.148594505496 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135538257143 0.134430193775 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543243330672 0.0742795772207 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.407558030368 0.324371583561 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0530728302603 0.0638462369009 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228537521982 0.228012699653 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044228108251 0.058150111329 76% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK

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Rates: 79.8516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9