Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to spend your money on an object that will last a long time than it is to spend your money on an experience (such as a vacation, concert, etc.) that will last only a short time. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is important to use money for right thing or purpose. Money is earned by great hardship with use of mind and the body. If money is spent on an object that will last a long time then it would be beneficial. I totally agree that it is better to spend money on an object that will last a long time than on a short time experience or fun.
Object will be useful for completing variety of tasks. Money can be used for purchasing objects like household electrical appliances, telephones or mobile phones and wooden furniture. If such things are bought than it can be used for majority of the functions or events. For example, my friend who is working in a multinational company bought huge screen smart television with her one month of salary, she is happy with her decision. As she can watch numerous reality TV shows, listen to music and also watch movies on the television. Instead of this if she would have used money for enjoyment purposes like going for movie in theatre than that would be for one single movie. But at home she can watch numerous movies on TV. So, it can be seen that she did best deal and appropriate use of money.
Purchasing object that will last a long time will save more money. Now a day because of high standard of living more money is required to fulfil the life needs. And if money is used for appropriate and strong reason than life can be lived in a better way. For instance, my uncle purchased a latest iPhone mobile last year. He is very happy with it and he uses for endless domestic and international calls. So, he explained me that this is one-time investment of money which will save more money by cancelling the need of doing international calls from outside internet café. Therefore, it is better if money is used on objects with consideration of pros and cons linked to it.
In contrast, if money is spent for entertainment and fun like visiting expensive live concerts or trips than it would be complete waste. For example, the famous singer or dancer who is organising their live concerts also have their CDs available in the market. They don’t perform anything new on the stage. So, they will earn money from us as their strategies of marketing Ads will attract people but attenders are just wasting their money. It seems worthy to buy Cd’s which will stay for long and can be enjoyed anytime.
In Sum, it is always better to spend your money on an object that will last a long time than it is to spend your money on an experience that will last only a short time. This will not only save money but bought objects will stay long time and can be used for future tasks. Everyone should definitely think before spending their money on short time experiences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... the television. Instead of this if she would have used money for enjoyment purposes like going...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 9.8082437276 275% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53564154786 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42302616293 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454175152749 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7269403408 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4814814815 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1851851852 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.74074074074 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443402108185 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145272248499 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.170232618737 0.0737576698707 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331744962912 0.150856017488 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.213738695911 0.0645574589148 331% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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