Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Truth be told, whether teenage children should take part-time jobs or not has generated a lot of controversy lately. The notion that part-time jobs can help teenagers prepare for adult life is a fascinating one and one that I believe in. Part-time jobs help children obtain practical experience, learn how to manage their finance, and prepare to become independent.
First and foremost, part-time jobs provide teenage children with practical experience along with theorical knowledge which is enlisted thourghout the school time. Consequently, when teenage children become adults, and they are looking for a legitimate job, a little field experience is of significant help in order to find a more appropriate job. For instance, when I was in highschool, I worked in a programming company as a part-time employee. For this reason, I had a good deal of knowledge in programming, therefore, I could easily persuade my employer to pick me among all other contenders.
Moreover, another beneficial aspect of part-time jobs for teenage children is that it paves the way for them to manage their own finance. In order to succeed, one should be able to manage his or her own money. Thus, learning financial management is of utmost priority for teenagers. Only by working can people learn how to handle their income, as well as their savings. Take my father as an example, he used to work several terms as a part-time eployee in various companies when he was a teenager. For this reason, he is a very talented financial manager, and he can handle our household's finance very well.
Admiteddly, not to mention the importance of becoming independant would be an oversight. Sooner or later, teenage children should be eble to become independant, and stand on their own feet. In this regard, what could be better than their working? Furthermore, environment of a working place is far different than that of a school. Not only relationships are formal, but also everything is more serious. In addition, erros are less tolerable in working environment. Thus, it is neccessary for teenage children to experience this difference, and be prepared for when they have to work full-time, and provide for their family.
All in all, working part-time brings about several benefits for teenage children. They can obtain valuable experience, achieve a comprehensive understanding of finance, and learn how to be independent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18974358974 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97078034053 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520512820513 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3536541538 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7272727273 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86363636364 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307532117996 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941031363494 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888237926781 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192952043028 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891785248709 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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