Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Human are always involving with financial subjects and money in their life, that is, after advent of money, people would like to know how they could manage their money to have a better life. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether young age is the best time of learning to manage money or not. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with the statement people should teach their children to learn how they could manage their financial life and how they could be financially responsible, while others would mention that the question depends on a great deal of factors, for example, situation of family's life financially or similar factors. As far as I'm concerned, I adopt a firm position that people must teach their children at young age to learn manage their own money. In what follows, I cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
First of all, it's important to consider that when people teach their children to manage their money at young age, it helps them out to realize different situation in future; for example when they would experience bad situation financially in adult period. Certainly, some people believe human are able to resolve every problem even financially even without education and learning of them. However, in most cases people, who learn to manage their money at young age, could resolve their financial problems better and easier rather than people, who did not learn. The results of a study conducted in my country indicate that 80 percent of the responsible people about their debts in bank system are people that learn financial subjects at young age. As you can see, education and teaching of children in financial context is the best way to have responsible adults in future.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that this story helps children to appreciate their parents' endeavors in which how they work hardly to financially provide a satisfying life. Therefore, these children teach their children to be more responsible about their money and economic life. Of course, for some people in some situations it would be very difficult to speak with their children about money because they are not able to financially manage their life therefore could not teach them readily. However, it would be fair to say that for most people t will be the most convenient way to treat economic people in future. To illustrate that idea let's consider the following example. I remember my nephew who is a successful entrepreneur that owes their parent's instructions while his parents are only two teachers without any high incomes.Thus, it is evident that parents' teaching play important role in success of children in future because they learn appreciate their parents' tries.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I'm of the opinion that in most cases financially responsible adults are people who learn to manage their own money at young age because they learn to face different situations and appreciate their parents' endeavors that help them to be economic. Consequently, it is highly recommended that authorities should put more emphasis on instruction of finance management and economics in schools.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, of course, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2713.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09005628518 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63030701106 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440900562852 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 835.2 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.1110310598 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.722222222 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6111111111 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312427019233 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118780464635 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712613361522 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224943600654 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536026009363 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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