Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who have learned many different skills are more likely to succeed than those who focus on learning only one skill.
In the modern era, how to become a successful person in life has raised a lot of debates among academicians. Some might hold the view that it is more efficient to learn as many skills as possible. However, others might maintain that focusing on one skill could be considered more beneficial. I personally contend that depending on the situation both options can be effective, and in the following, I will bring outstanding reasons why.
First off, people generally tend to reach their goals as fast as possible, so they usually consult with experts to find their golden way of success without any waste of time. For example, from the early stages in school, they try to discover their talents and favorite subjects. So, they can start learning related required skills sooner to guarantee their future careers. They usually show a great persistence to become skilled in one special field and may even avoid learning other skills. Statistics show that children who have discovered their talent from the very beginning, through being inspired by their family atmosphere, their parent’s jobs or a very organized school schedule, which shaped their thoughts to concentrate on just one thing, commonly become quickly successful compared to their classmates who were wandering around learning different skills. These children may be called gifted, a gift that may be started out very small, perhaps invisible to most people, but then they had added, built upon, and massively extended it by concentrating on the subject.
On the other hand, being in the right place cannot happen to everyone. Some may start to learn a skill with so much enthusiasm, but after a while lose their concentration and energy to continue it due to the lack of harmony with what they really love. As a result, they may switch to studying another skill. Although it may seem time-consuming, these people gain a good amount of various experiences, which may help them at the end of the day. For example, young Einstein used to work in a patent office as a typist for several years, but who knows how much typing others’ scientific results had affected his growing mind. If he had just focused on physics, would he become as distinguished as he became later? Although it is undeniable that mastering in one field leads to fast progress, no one can deny the role of creativity in achievements. Mixing the things one learns from various skills, the outcome may become unique and valuable. Also, people may even find this more fantastic to experience different careers and ultimately choose what they really enjoy. It may take longer to discover, but brings happiness for the one who has struggled hard to achieve.
All in all, becoming successful and making a very good living on what one really loves to do is a great gift, which requires learning skills. I firmly recommend that people should first consider their talents and desires to identify the skills needed to learn. If they focus on one skill, they reach what they want sooner, while they may enjoy discovering more fields by learning different skills.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, then, thus, while, for example, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2582.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99419729207 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62425857847 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558994197292 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2943667475 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.260869565 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4782608696 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78260869565 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235208545176 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737098715352 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592027733037 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163467661427 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300969959286 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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