Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Depending on personal experience and personality type, people might have different opinions about this subject. Nowadays, by progressing the technology, people's life is changed dramatically and it has both positive and negative impacts. One of the noteworthy results of developed technology is the Internet. As far as I am concerned, I agree that the Internet provides a lot of valuable information for people because of several reasons such as helping people to decrease the risk of death and elaborate their academic ability.
The first reason of current discussion is about the health of people. In this regard, it should be noted that by increasing the health data and having update information about that issue, people can resist the disease more and decrease the risk of death. On of the methods to reach this goal is using the internet. People can read the information about healthy food and how to have a good diet by the internet. Furthermore, they can have contact with well-known doctors or professors to get their advice about living healthy. For instance, my friend had cancer for a couple of years and he didn't know what to do to be better. He started to contact with a high skill doctor in another country. So, he used the internet to get his information and do his advices. After a while, he could overcome the cancer. So, One of the substantial reasons that I agree with using the internet is eliminating the risk of death in people's life.
Another momentous reason is about the people's academic ability. In this case, it sounds logical to say that education is an important issue in society and government might do their best to prevalent this issue in families. Research showed one of the reasons that encourage people to study in university is the internet. By using the internet people can study in any country that is far away and it is called "virtual education". In past, because there was no technology such as the internet, people could not to study and increase their academic ability, but the conditions are changed nowadays. For example, my brother started to work in a factory when he was a teenager. By using the internet, he could register in virtual education and began to elaborate his academic ability. After a couple of years, he became an engineer in related of his course in the factory. Hence, people can improve their academic ability by using the internet.
In conclusion, the internet has advantageous and disadvantageous in people's life, but from my point of view, its advantageous is more them are helping people to be healthy more than before and improve their ability in academic studying.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...had cancer for a couple of years and he didnt know what to do to be better. He starte...
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Message: Did you mean: 'In the past'?
Suggestion: In the past
...s called 'virtual education'. In past, because there was no technology such a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2210.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94407158837 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77476536906 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460850111857 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6020097879 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0833333333 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243061618645 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724564989788 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592728817713 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149877286642 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459989038496 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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