Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, being successful and prosperous has been one of the most crucial ends for every human beings. Recently, by improving in education quality and advent of so many jobs which require academic education, the factors for being a successful person and have a proper job has changed a lot. There are numerous contention on the fact whether people have to work hard in school or not in order to have a proper job in future. Personally, I believe that although studying hard is a necessary factor, there are other copious factors involved. In what follows, I will delve into my double-side conspicuous reasons on this issue.
First off, taking into account the fact that with advance in technology in the world we call it modern, numerous amount of jobs have risen which require academic education. Needless to say that this technology advance has influence on the quality of education and ultimately, more people have to compete for being accepted in the university due to the fact that the level of hardness has become higher. Thus, in order to win the competition of getting a position in society, people have to study hard. For instance, my sister was a really good student and she was the first in her class. Last month, she was about to have a job in a company. But there was another person who had equal abilities. Finally, my sister got the job because she had better grades.
On contrary, as I mentioned above, studying hard is not the only factor. Other factors involved in this process would be the person's social abilities which are really decisive for getting a proper job in the future. Take a well-graduated student as an example; if he does not have the ability to make a conversation with coworkers and clients, he will not be a constructive person even though he has graduated in a high-level university. An established survey has collected data to estimate the effects of social behaviors of employees using an experiment observation. The result were surprising: the more the social abilities the employees had, the more the productive their works were.
To put it briefly, contemplating both sides, one soon realizes that no one can be successful without having both good education and social ability in the modern lifestyle where people are putting all their efforts to have a better life. Thus, I recommend that people be hardworking and strengthen their communication abilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 425, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ol or not in order to have a proper job in future. Personally, I believe that although st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, finally, first, if, really, so, then, thus, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95331695332 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75820167365 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520884520885 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9298542968 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.105263158 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4210526316 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174764257517 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543313242085 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278606931116 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105706804562 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322342535612 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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