Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.
When it comes to the issue that do celebrities deserve to great amount of attention? Some people believe that they are worthy to have a huge of attention, because of the constructive role, they play within the society. However, others maintain the opposite view, and they think that celebrities participate in advertisements and give false information to people. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
The first and most important reason is that famous people encourage juveniles to increase their efforts. As we all know, they gain the reputation because of the unique talent, special proficiency, and surly; working hard. They teach teenagers nothing is impossible, and they should attempt more, focus on their talents, manage their time and source, and ignore ones who say that it could not be possible. Teenagers like to be one of them, and surely; they try to use of their procedure for achieving goals. I think that there in no better example than Cristiano Ronaldo the former football player for the Manchester United and Real Madrid. He was living in a poor family, but he had a big ambitions. For achieve these, he leave house and went to another city for improving their football skills. More efforts make him so great footballer that he now is a pattern for million of young people around the world. Generally, celebrities stimulate youths to develop their performance and never give up.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. They could draw people’s attention to important matters and enhance their knowledge. I think that a small example can give some light on this topic. Human activities have increased the amount of Carbon dioxide, which is the important green house gas in the atmosphere. As a result, we have witnessed the Earth temperature increased, which is called global warming. Governments allocate more budgets for giving people awareness of this predicament, and unfortunately people do not pay attention to it. In this way, using of celebrities’ reputation could attract people’s attention to this topic. If they ask of people to use public transportation such as subways and trains instead of private cars, their fans do this. Overall, the biggest advantage of attention to celebrities lies in the fact that they as influential persons could increase people’s knowledge.
Admittedly, I never tell that all famous behaviors and opinions are right, and we should accept them in all areas. It is best to hear out the opinion of famous personalities, but finally make an intelligence and informed choice base upon our own experience, information and intelligence.
Taking into account all of these factors, we may reach the conclusion that well-known people obviously increase people’s knowledge and assist teenagers to have a better life. Of course, as an English proverb goes “coin has two sides,” those who take the opposite view are partly reasonable that sometimes famous opinions are wrong, particularly they wan to advertise a commodity. Nonetheless, I think that its benefits outweigh dangers. Last but not least, let us hope well-known people pay more attention on their activities and try to be useful for society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 689, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'ambition'?
Suggestion: ambition
...ving in a poor family, but he had a big ambitions. For achieve these, he leave house and ...
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Line 2, column 722, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'leaves'.
Suggestion: leaves
... a big ambitions. For achieve these, he leave house and went to another city for impr...
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Line 2, column 867, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...footballer that he now is a pattern for million of young people around the world. Gener...
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Line 6, column 242, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...sh proverb goes 'coin has two sides,' those who take the opposite view are p...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'well', 'i think', 'of course', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233494363929 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.144927536232 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0950080515298 0.0866891130778 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0418679549114 0.046263068375 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0724637681159 0.0685040099705 106% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0998389694042 0.118717715034 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0161030595813 0.0351676179071 46% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.91723025279 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0289855072464 0.0309702414327 94% => OK
Particles: 0.00322061191626 0.00188951952338 170% => OK
Determiners: 0.0789049919485 0.0887237588012 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0144927536232 0.0209618222197 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00966183574879 0.0139019557991 69% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3289.0 2387.08602151 138% => OK
No of words: 532.0 408.028673835 130% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18233082707 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48200974243 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.387218045113 0.338922669872 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.283834586466 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203007518797 0.174417080927 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.154135338346 0.112833075102 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91723025279 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546992481203 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 68.3894004086 59.2087087015 116% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6684587814 140% => OK
Sentence length: 18.3448275862 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4923621341 48.84282405 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.413793103 120.699889404 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3448275862 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48275862069 0.644075263715 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 46.7282862328 45.7405998639 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.34782608696 1.45489161554 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363783634342 0.300154397459 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0686591897253 0.103427244359 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0689743478862 0.0752933317313 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.428969376702 0.497263757937 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139126991524 0.151897553556 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123085764702 0.114077575197 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668161118287 0.0781384742642 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.292790673435 0.336927656856 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.113114825034 0.067059652881 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25030373665 0.210909579961 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478225187274 0.0618886996521 77% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8870967742 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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