Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Students in universities, in addition to being educated in the specific field, also can flourish their other talents by using university facilities. Although some people are of the opinion that universities are places for only education, and all budget of those must be spent in educational equipment such as libraries, I strongly disagree with this. As far as I am concerned, same funding must be spent on sports and social activities. Among many reasons why I told this opinion, two stand out and will be discussed hereunder.
To begin with, alongside study, exercise is very necessary for students, because that reduces stress and excretes toxic from body and as a result, he or she will have a healthy life and fresh mind. In this regard, there is an old Persian proverb that states, “Healthy mind is in a healthy body”. In addition, statistics show the fact that the students who are members of a university’s sports team, not only flourish their sport’s talents but also they are successful in their courses. Therefore they can progress in both of these fields. Even there are an examples that national teams players have been chosen from university’s competition. For instance, Oshin Sahakian is one of the famous players of Iranian national basketball team who was a student of Isfahan University, was choose for the national squad from university’s basketball team.
Another reason for this view is that students, in order to take social responsibilities in future, should be prepared in university. For this propose, students improved their community relations by participating in university’s social activities. In this regard, we can note that the most successful managers in various fields have been directors of student associations in their university life. In other words, It is undeniable that the more experience you can gain, the more success can achieve in future ,so students can gain invaluable experience and enjoy them in their future life by attending to social activities and being in the different situation.
In summary, with all this taken into account, I believe that university is a small scale of a city which is established on education basis, but we must be aware that we can not forget other requirements of citizens. Therefore university presidents in order to provide all the needs of students should allocate a proper budget to each university’s activities such as sport, social, educational and other activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in summary, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28894472362 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15327433982 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542713567839 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1729489685 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5625 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123070657621 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463545737302 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303890243904 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0818029339086 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148980253751 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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