Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Throughout the history, the dependecy within parents and their youths has been established a perennial relationship among them. Therefore, it is not far-fetched to presume that this strong conncetion plays a paramount role in decision-making process. However, to what extent this influence has been changed during years depends on the lens through which one is looking. There is a growing segment of people who contend this idea that today's juveniles no longer rely on their parents to assist them making a dicsion rather than past. I personally concur with this idea, and in the ensuing paragraph the rationale behind this opinion, will be firther elaborated.
First and most exquisite point coming the mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerened with the wide access to limiteles sources of information. Hardly can anyone deny the fact that with the advent of the Internet, scoeities witnessed a revolution in myriad facets of life. In Before that, getting the advice was the main source for acquiring information and people had not wide access to the books, magazines and even TV programs. In this circumstances, parents regarded as the role models for their children and guided them in multiplie aspects of their lives. Nowadays in comparision to the past, a wide variety of information is readily availbale for people that makes them needless to ask their parents' help intermintently. Therefore, having watched various usefull TV programs, ot reading different websites, young people can gain much more infomration than their parents can provide for them. Subsequently, they opt to refer to their parents when these sources become useless. These cases become restrained to mere emotional desions such as alleviating their heatbreaking after breaking up.
Another vital point which should be taken into consideation is the stucture of family in modern societies. Needless to say that in the current states of affaris we face, in which the word of family has entirely varied menaing rather than the past. Previously, the extended familyies including parents, their parent and the kids. Admittedly, so tight are the tides within this kind of family that their life is interdependent. In fact, every single decision made for each of them directly affected the whole of other memebrs of the family. Subsequently, young people were more clined to require suggestions from their parents to hinder accurring the bad happens. On the other hand, today's youths are reluctant to live with their parents after passing the adolesance du to their tendecy to become independence. Apparently, parents do not fierce impact on their lives and they want to experience the world without relying on their parents.
To wrap it up, it ismore judicious to sy that children are not dependant on their parent to make decisions. Not only do they have access to wide range of information from various sources but also the alteration in the families' stucture makes the young people far more independent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 439, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...oks, magazines and even TV programs. In this circumstances, parents regarded as the ...
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Line 4, column 64, Rule ID: DEPENDENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
...e judicious to sy that children are not dependant on their parent to make decisions. Not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, in fact, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2509.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22708333333 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78378785585 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.4212152592 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.086956522 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8695652174 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69565217391 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374029405486 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999861645816 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06902371838 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22875924682 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278123931162 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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