Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout the history, people have been perennially affected each other. Therefore, it is not far-fetched to presume that their relationships are instensly interconntected. However, to what extent this independecy should be taken seriously depends on the lens through which one is looking. There is a growing segment of people who contend this idea that the occurrances acrros the world requires specific attention regardless of its direct consequences of out daily life. I personally concur with this statement, and in the ensuing paragraph, the rationale behind this opinion will be further elaborated.
First and most exquisit point coming to the mind to substantitate my standpoint is concerned with this matter that the being far away from those event does not assure the saftiness . Hardly can anyone deny the fact that despite all the ristict regulations in order to keep the borders strong, there are still some powers that incline to rule the world. Take the Iraq war as an example. In 2004 that the unites states of America decided to attacj Iraq, no one believed that this happeing would be applicable. There were numerous justifications for this decision, thought, the fact is mano other countries such as Iran were influenced by this attack. The iranian people witnessed the horrified atmosphere throughout this event while it was concurrently with the most amazing Itanian holidays. In this circumstance, almostall the people were asked each other whatis the next goal? Undoubtedly, having been aware of the events, individuals think about their own lives even if they have not direct impact on their daily life.
Another Crucial point which should be taken into consideration is that the world is becoming unified. Needless to say that although events all around the world may not influence personnal life, people recieve the feeling of people who had been affected with that particular events. As in illustartion, the specific ceremony in other country. Getting acquainted with culture and people living in other region of the world, people give the sense of intimitation. In fact, we live in are that individuals no longer merely pay attention o their own country, indeed they reluctant to become isolated. Admittedly, broadening the knowldege constituted a paramount sections of life of those who are proponent to have a better world by become familiar with the myraid characteristics of other nations and people.
To wrap it up, it is more judicous to say that no matter events have effect on the daily life or not, it is vital that people have sifficient knowledge regarding the events happening all arround the world. Not only do these events encourage them to think deeply abount their lives, but also by familiarizig with these events they can establish constructive relations with toher parts of the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 141, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this event' or 'those events'?
Suggestion: this event; those events
...his matter that the being far away from those event does not assure the saftiness . Hardly ...
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Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...hose event does not assure the saftiness . Hardly can anyone deny the fact that de...
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Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eluctant to become isolated. Admittedly, broadening the knowldege constituted a p...
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Line 3, column 686, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...d a paramount sections of life of those who are proponent to have a better world by bec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, therefore, while, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2382.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21225382932 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79139142671 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575492341357 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2066427548 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.428571429 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7619047619 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17012857352 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467834197758 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431148284186 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113863338159 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375452685305 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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