Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.

Today, most of the parents try to encourage their teenage children to take a part-time job. They may have different purposes for doing this. For example, reducing the spendings of the family or trying to get rid from their children during the day. Some people believe that taking part time jobs for children is useful and parents should promote their children to get a job. On the other hand, others not because they think that the children should concentrate on the school and taking a job will waste their time. Personally, I think that if parents encourage their children to take a part-time job, they will really help their children for their adult life.

First, they learn that how they can become financially independent from their family. If they earn money from a job, they are less dependent to their family for money because they have a little amount of money which they can use it for any purpose. Also, they learn how to manage their earnings in the future. For instance, I used to work for a computer company when I was 16 and because I was in a highschool, my job was part-time and they paid me around $40 a week. After graduation from my high school, I continued my job in that company and my income rose to $200 a week. As a result, I become financially independent from my family and I didn't get any money from my parents for my daily spends. Moreover, I tried to invest my money in industry by buying some stocks. Eventually, I applied abroad for a university and I afforded all of the costs needed to apply and migrate to a new country without any assistance from my family. Hence, I think that if a child do a part-time job from highschool, it can become financially independent from its family.

Second, a child who works for an employer can learn a lot of knowledge and experiences that are useful in the future. When you learn new techniques, there are more jobs available for you in the future because you know more. For example, as I mentioned before, I worked for a company 7 years ago. I had abundant knowledge about Microsoft Windows Server and also managing clients withing a computer network. However, I didn't have any knowledge about Linux, which it is an open source operating system and it is quite different from Microsoft Windows. In those days, Linux was used in almost all companies and I decided to learn linux. After a year of working with my coworker in that company, I learnt Linux without paying money to anyone, just by sitting beside my coworker. This experience thaught me that you can learn a lot of things in a job without spending money.

Third, they can manage their time and also their energy in the future in order to become more efficient in their daily life. If they handle their job and studies in highschool from childhood, then they can manage their stressful life in adult life. For instance, my highschool had a mathematic teacher who was a high demanding teacher. He gaves us a lot of assignments to do every week and doing my part-time job and these assignments was really hard for me because I didn't have enough time to handle them. However, I tried to create a daily schedule for my job and also my assignments. I wrote them on a piece of paper and after that, I could manage everything in my daily life because I had a program for every single second of my life. Finally, this really helped mein my adult life because as I am at the university from 08:00 to 16:00, I have a full time job from 17:00 to 23:00 and I can easily manage my university assignments and also doing my job. Thus, my childhood experience really helps me to manage my current situation in adult life.

In sum, I think that parents should encourage their children to go for a work. Not only for money, but also for numerous benefits in their adult life such as managing their time and learning new things.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 113.0 43.0788530466 262% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3153.0 1977.66487455 159% => OK
No of words: 695.0 407.700716846 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53669064748 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.13447686263 4.48103885553 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48784676015 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.398561151079 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 993.6 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 29.0 9.59856630824 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9121466543 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5454545455 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0606060606 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 19.0 4.88709677419 389% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314768354985 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105041628401 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0960080264739 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218428048299 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107210234358 0.0645574589148 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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