Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From a broad perspective, in the current states of affairs we face, in which so busy are juveniles with their studying that rarely do they find an opportunity to be far away from their lesson. Therefore, it is not far-fetched to presume that they can benefit a lot if they learn how to pass this precious time in a most influential way. There is a grwoing segment of people who content this idea that going for a part-tiime job bring a variety of advantages for young people rather than playing a musical instrument or a particular sport. I personally concur with this idee, and in the ensuing paragraph, the rationale behind this opinion will be further elaborated.
First and foremost, getting a part-time job assist them to find better job in a future. There is no denying to the fact that so fierce is the competition between youths nowadays that none of them accomplishes to get a decent job without acquiering proficiency in that career. Therefore, no matter they work as an carpenter or accountant, theyr experience will be precious in the future of some facets. The most prominence issue is regarding the employers' point of view. Undoubtedly, companies are seeking to recruit those who have more inclination and motivation to work. Actually, youngsters' reluctant to have a job in their free time means there are some others priorities in their lives which are worth() to allocate their time for those acitivities. SUbsequently, they pass up their chance to belong to the enthusistic group that standes rather a good chance to get a job.
aNother vital point which should be taken into considerationis the matter of juveniles personality. Needless to say that gaining an experience or broadening the infomation are not the mere merits of accepting the job. Indeed, having woked, young people develop their skills in various fileds regardless of their knowledge. It is very crucial for children to become accountable. Children learn how to undertake the responsibilities of a particualr task and make a point to do it a best possinle way. Besides this, they out to justify any mistake or advesse outsome related to their tasks. Furthermore, discipline is another positive ramifications of having a job. It comes as no surprise that children who wrok know how to behave respecfully with the othe individuals or appear on time on their meeting or dates. As a matter of fact, their work experience augment their personality in varied aspects that may be even be more worthy than their practical knowledge they had learned.
To wrap it up, it is more judicous to say that getting a job in the extra time of students is the best approach for them. Not only their practical experience will assist them to readily get a job, but also it breeds them to enter into the real society by nurishing their personlity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2337.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88912133891 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85591826703 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523012552301 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7761729567 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.227272727 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7272727273 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129883490027 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361380741435 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359251474268 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824495774337 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271544660422 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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