Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From a broad perspective, in the current states of affairs we face, in which so busy are juveniles with their studying that rarely do they find an opportunity to be far away from their lesson. Therefore, it is not far-fetched to presume that they can benefit a lot if they learn how to pass this precious time in a most propitious way. There is a growing segment of people who content this idea that going for a part-time job brings a variety of advantages for young people rather than occupying their spare time with playing a musical instrument or a particular sport. I personally concur with this idea, and in the ensuing paragraph, the rationale behind this opinion will be further elaborated.
First and foremost, getting a part-time job assist them to find a better job in the future. There is no denying the fact that so fierce is the competition among youths nowadays that none of them accomplishes to get a decent job without acquiring proficiency in that career. Therefore, no matter they work as a carpenter or accountant, they experience will be precious in the future of some facets. The most prominence issue is regarding the employers' point of view. Undoubtedly, companies are seeking to recruit those who have more inclination and motivation to work. Actually, youngsters' reluctant to have an occupation in their free time means there are some others priorities in their lives which are worth allocating their time for those activities. Subsequently, they pass up their chance to belong to the enthusiastic group that stands rather a good chance to get a job.
Another vital point which should be taken into consideration is the matter of juveniles' personality. Needless to say that gaining an experience or broadening the information are not the mere merits of accepting the job. Indeed, having worked, young people develop their skills in various fields regardless of their knowledge. It is very crucial for children to become accountable. Children learn how to undertake the responsibilities of a particular task and make a point of performing it in a best possible way. Besides this, they ought to justify any mistake or adverse outcome related to their tasks. Furthermore, discipline is another positive ramifications of having a job. Thus, it comes as no surprise that children who work know how to behave respectfully with the other individuals or appear on time on their meeting or dates. As a matter of fact, their work experience augments their personality in varied aspects that may even be more commendable than their practical knowledge they had learned.
To wrap it up, it is more judicious to say that getting a job in the extra time of students is the best approach for them. Not only their practical experience will play a paramount role in order to readily get a job in the future, but also it breeds them to become prepared to enter into the real society by nourishing their character.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 492, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...sk and make a point of performing it in a best possible way. Besides this, they o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2432.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92307692308 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8617668869 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518218623482 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6432743418 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.545454545 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4545454545 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134888748271 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366561232231 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413313966544 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085857426715 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344335726346 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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