Do you agree or disagree: Is it as important for older people to study or learn new things as it is for younger people?
As an old saying goes, you cannot teach an old dog new trick. That’s why people normally believe it is hard to change habits and acquire new skills. But I think it is not true and the elderly have every reason to keep up with the times.
For one thing, keeping open-minded to new things helps raise life quality. While technological advances have greatly simplified lives and diversified means of entertainment, old generation are missing out on the convenience young people take for granted. For example, if the old can be encouraged to use Uber, a cellphone-based cab service, they would not have to stand by the sideway, wait on cold winter nights and leave it all up to chance. Instead, all they need to do is to type in the destination, set departure time and choose a car brand. And then the online system would sift through all the cars in the neighborhood and pick the right one according to the given criterion. In this case, the nearest car driver would pick the passage up right on time. The same goes for household chores. With the advent of smart technology, electronic appliances like dish washer and vacuum cleaner have all come into being, which deliberates the elderly from grunt work. Besides, they used to have limitless recreational activities due to the constraint of physical conditions. But things won’t be the same if the old know a thing or two about computers and the virtual world. The simulation games and home theater system would take entertainment to the next level without taking old people outdoor.
For another, mastering new skills helps bridge the generation gap. Young people are innately fast learners. Everyday they are bombarded with all kinds of novel ideas and new inventions. This exposure will reshape their mindset and mentality. When they incorporate newly minted knowledge and skills into their daily lives, the way they look at the world will start to evolve and differ from that of their elder generations. A retired grandpa might find it hard to understand when seeing the teenage grandson either texting or taking selfies on his cellphone, a device never far away from his grasp. But if the old man knows how to download a social app and sign in to an account, he will come to realization that such photo-taking obsession is nothing but a way to seek attention and feel good about oneself. By updating homepage, posting everyday events and commenting on each other, young people will feel free to socialize on the virtual network. So if the old man can learn some tricks and check out Twitter and Facebook, he will soon get familiar with hot topics and buzzwords.
To sum up, taking in new things is important not only to young people; but the elderly can also be better served if they give it a shot.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, so, then, while, for example, i think, for one thing, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80334728033 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59851837667 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581589958159 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1903721101 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9166666667 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188597050641 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532330880182 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539543692364 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109033692499 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277686079235 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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