It is important for the government to spend money on art and concert halls than on the recreational facilities such as the swimming pools or playground.
The government's decision has a crucial role in the society. The investment has been made by the leaders can alter the people life standard and welfare. While some people may hold the view that the majority of investments should focus on the art and concert halls; others, on the other hand, believe that the priority should be given to the recreational facilities. I personally agree with the second belief. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
The first reason which one should consider is that there is a huge demand for the relaxation. As a matter of fact, modern life obliges the people to have the hectic lifestyle; the individuals of the society are in the hurry to present their duties and responsibilities. Based on this chaos situation, the requirement for the span of time for relaxation is necessitated. Therefore, the elaborate recreational centers such as swimming pools and playgrounds are the decent options to address this demand. A vivid example can be given to shed light on the issue is my own instance. I am architecture, and I spend daily eight hours in my office. During my free period, I prefer to do the type of activities which enhance my mood. As a result, I go to the swimming pool in my hometown; by spending solely two hours in there, I feel fresh and recharged, and ready for the arduous weekdays. This example explicitly illustrates the importance of the recreational hub for the increment of the citizens' functions. Consequently, the investment in this field is a wise and sound idea.
The next equally striking point is that the people suffer the obesity and they need physical activities to be fit. Indeed, the modern society and its mechanical lifestyle lead the dwellers to be less active. This life pattern causes the people faces the knotty health issues such as the heart attack. According to the noteworthy, intelligence survey conducted in my country, the risk of heart attack at the current decade is threefold more than the previous one; moreover, the primary cause of this incident is the individuals' dormant lifestyle. One of the ways to cope with this crisis is the physical activity. In a case which the authority put emphasis toward the recreational places, the people will be more eager to go there; and they will have the healthy and active lifestyle.
The last reason which advocates my outlook is that the recreational places are required for the children to experience their childhood as vivid as possible. Unfortunately, the ongoing life pattern forces the children not to experience their childhood as in the past. For instance, by living in the apartment and for the sake of some principles, the kids are not allowed to jump or run in the house. Thereby they gather the massive amount of the energy and this energy converts to the other problematic behavior. However, the creational areas are the proper environments for the kids. They can release their feeling and energy without the restriction, which is beneficial for the kids' mental health.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the government should put the spotlight on the recreational places; since the current citizens require the place for relaxation, and doing physical activity. Besides, it is effective on the children's mood and mental health.
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Discourse Markers used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242038216561 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.130573248408 0.158761421928 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0955414012739 0.0866891130778 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0350318471338 0.046263068375 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0429936305732 0.0685040099705 63% => OK
Prepositions: 0.106687898089 0.118717715034 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0222929936306 0.0351676179071 63% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85266850348 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0302547770701 0.0309702414327 98% => OK
Particles: 0.0015923566879 0.00188951952338 84% => OK
Determiners: 0.156050955414 0.0887237588012 176% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0175159235669 0.0209618222197 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00955414012739 0.0139019557991 69% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3404.0 2387.08602151 143% => OK
No of words: 568.0 408.028673835 139% => OK
Chars per words: 5.99295774648 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.357394366197 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.271126760563 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.18485915493 0.174417080927 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135563380282 0.112833075102 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85266850348 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507042253521 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 62.3411216962 59.2087087015 105% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6684587814 140% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5862068966 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8062463975 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.379310345 120.699889404 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5862068966 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.655172413793 0.644075263715 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 46.6988829529 45.7405998639 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.7786259542 1.45489161554 122% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.568525887752 0.300154397459 189% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106508096178 0.103427244359 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0711402974896 0.0752933317313 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.59700929279 0.497263757937 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141037198588 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.239688683371 0.114077575197 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793978528548 0.0781384742642 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.623526654767 0.336927656856 185% => Paragraphs have same ideas.
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0627953650431 0.067059652881 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.427461503661 0.210909579961 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262120654829 0.0618886996521 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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