People today spent too much time on personal enjoyment "doing things they like do rather than things they should do.
Enjoyment is an important part of usual works and a lot of people are working for enjoyment. Considering that enjoying the things we do has effect on the results of work and also our health condition, so nowadays majority of people seeking the things that are not boring. In my view, people like to do jobs or entertainment that are enjoyable for two important reasons.
The main reason is that our working efficiency will be high when we are doing the enjoyable things. When you are doing jobs or works that you like, the results will be better because you have focus on that work and you try to do your best. For example, I remember that during my university studies I was good on the courses that I liked but I had worse scores on the boring courses. My major in university was Chemical Engineering and so we had some introductory courses such as math and physics which were so boring and repetitive, so my score on them was really awful. But after three or four terms the essential courses such as heat transfer and mass transfer started which were really interesting and now after about ten years I remember the topics and I like to review them. This experience taught me that during my life I have to seek the works that are interesting and I like them so I will improve my self with them.
Another reason is that, if we enjoy the thing that we do, we will have better promotion and development on that particular thing. Passion and enjoyment have direct relationship, when you enjoy something you will have more passion to do and finish that. For instance, now my working field is environmental issues and I like it. When five years ago I have started working on environmental subjects, I didn't have any work experience but now I work for a well-known company in these issues and I have got good position in the company. This example shows that if we do the works that we like our promotion will be touchable.
In conclusion, even though some people only do the things they should do, others think about the enjoyment of works and they want to do a thing that they like. Promotion in you career and high efficiency in the works that you do will be tangible if you do the things you like. Finally, I think that today we have better world because a lot of people are doing the things they like.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ed working on environmental subjects, I didnt have any work experience but now I work...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, really, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1884.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47505938242 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48149304466 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418052256532 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1348936535 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.823529412 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7647058824 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3082104437 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133673743181 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137973716551 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249442062618 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164248281084 0.0645574589148 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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