People would be happier if they had fewer possessions
Nowadays, we witness many kinds of people in our society. Some people are in the best finance situation while others are not. In this way, some people believe that persons who have less money are happier than others. From my point of view, if you have less property in your life, you will not be happy. Actually, you should try to work hard and you will not have joyful time in your life as well. My arguments for these points are explained as follows.
First, if you see that you have fewer possess than others, you will certainly try to work hard so as to earn more money. For example, if the normal hour of work is just eight hours, you will ignore this time and try to work more than that hour because you know that if you do not try to work a lot, you will not be able to earn more money. In addition, for earning more money you may do some activities that are not appealing for you. For instance, I know some engineers that they cannot find a suitable job for themselves therefore they have no opportunity to earn money so as to have a good life like others. Thus, they try to do casual works such as taxi drivers or dish washers at the restaurant.
Second, if you do not have enough wealth in comparison with others, you will not have joyful time in your life because you may feel sad that other people are able to live easily without any distress but you should try to work hard. Actually, you cannot stand other people lives since you cannot have a great life like them. Furthermore, when you face with harsh conditions you will be upset. To give an example, when you see that you are not able to meet your basic needs such as buying warm clothes in the winter or even preparing amount of food to eat, you will undoubtedly feel disappointed. As a result , you cannot be happy in your life.
All in all, from what I have discussed, these days, we can see various people in our country that each of them has different condition, especially in economic issues. Some people are wealthy but some people are poor. Under this condition, people think that poor people are happier in comparison with rich persons. In my opinion, poor people cannot feel happy in their lives since not only do they have to toil but also they cannot have an enjoyable life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, you know, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39285714286 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1431391992 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457142857143 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0663892185 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.25 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135585829744 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580282605722 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450827915159 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101043693534 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517469771881 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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